Love Affair

#24 Posted by swarrier on March 1, 2006 9:11:13 am

Re: # 21

Okay I remember now. I wonder if Aakash will join the Maoist rebels. )))

Amrita
I liked the story. I liked the light and shade. Somehow, with apologies to Paul Simon, this world looks better in black and white.

#23 Posted by rajesh_shankara on March 1, 2006 8:25:37 am

Amrita, wonderful stuff. It was impressive the way the reader does not lose track of the dialogue despite the near absence of the `he said`, `she smirked` routine. Can`t shake the feeling this is a scene from your novel.

Will look forward to that greatly after this...

#22 Posted by amrita on March 1, 2006 8:19:55 am

Yay! more people in the fishy tank! :)

Jang - achcha, that way. yeah... I`ve always found that men like to talk when its about themselves to a woman. In fact, some of them you can`t shut up. Hehehe. Or maybe its just me. Hmm. And no, Random House aint gonna get a whiff of this. it seems pretty unpublishable in most markets :(

Nadia - thank you... its nice to see you around again.

Shobie - he`s definitely her rakhail :D

Manto - thank you... as Swarrier says, I think its ``Hazaaron Khwaishein Aisi``. Havent seen it yet but its on the netflix queue. I hear the director is now coming out with a movie called ``Bahut Nikle Mere Armaan`` :)

Sam - famous last words :P thanks for coming by dudette!

Khams - dumbo, its shorter than most of my other works... including stuff on the blog. Its mostly conversation which is why it seems so long. Humpf. But i will take your compliment and run with it...

#21 Posted by MantoLives on March 1, 2006 7:59:03 am

swarrier...

Oh the ghalib couplet...

The affair between the woman and that rich kid wannabe marxist revolutionary...

#20 Posted by khamkhwa. on March 1, 2006 7:34:48 am

...it`s too long and it could do with some editing, i have NOT read it but knowing you it must be good...therefore...congratulations...;)

#19 Posted by swarrier on March 1, 2006 7:10:31 am

Re: # 17

Probably ``Hazaaaron Kwaishein Aisi``, I don`t see the connection with the story though.

S

#18 Posted by Saminasha on March 1, 2006 5:14:46 am

Ams,

Lovely flow! Will comment more later :)

#17 Posted by MantoLives on March 1, 2006 5:03:32 am

Dear Amrita,

An excellent piece as usual. You have a quality of bringing your characters alive...

Kind of reminded me of an Indian art movie I saw... about this guy- a leftist and son of a Muslim judge... a girl who is married to an IAS/ICS officer ... and a thoroughbred middle class capitalist guy who knew them at college ... called Raj malhotra or something...

Does anybody remember the name.,.. was it ``Khawashain itni...``

#16 Posted by shobig_sifar on March 1, 2006 1:58:51 am

Re: # 10 haha, atif payee would never let a single opporunity slip his hands! This aakash guy is not her patee, so doen`t look like a case of polyandry. albeit for a non-machoistic society, he would be termed her rakhail :D

#15 Posted by Nadia_Zehra on March 1, 2006 1:47:17 am

Lovely fresh approach Amrita;
Well the factor of coherence was little bit arraying the harmonics and cascading the novelty.
Keep Writing;

#14 Posted by amrita on February 28, 2006 7:55:53 pm

PS -

Nasah - just read what you referred to. That was an interesting article... hmmm. yeah, i wonder how that woould play into the woman being unfaithful. And that story about Kaifi Azmi was really funny even though i didnt completely understand the context. :(

Jilawatan - yeah i wasnt aiming to break new ground. just wanted to have fun writing and give the readers a good time. hope you had that. as for helping you with what to say... LOL! you reminded me of the boys in my school who would call girls up and read lines from Cosmo and other women;s magazines and stuff coz they didnt know what to say!

#13 Posted by jang on February 28, 2006 7:53:25 pm

amrita he feels unreal becuase he seems to talk a lot..kinda could be her ``imaginary`` friend..i mean he almost seems to initiate pillow talk.

and you laugh now..but when the random house (or scholastic :D ) editor asks you to add some curry-to-the-storry, you will remember my comment.

atif, are you now considering immigrating to Himachal Pradesh.. (polyandry is better than five-sister polygamy)..

#12 Posted by amrita on February 28, 2006 7:40:00 pm

hey, visitors in the fishy tank! thank you one and all for swinging by...

kaptain - well, she`s already married and so probably knows how green the grass is. thats one of the reasons why she`s not interested in leaving her husband. but yes, an excess of love is boredom... at least for some of us. thanks for reading!

zeemax - thanks! but no, this isnt a true story. :) but i`m going to take that as a compliment.

sajal - long time no see... how`ve you been? thank you for the kind words... and the excellent questions. thats what i was trying to convey - that their answers are something that we each need to find for ourselves.

parthaab - i actually dont think there`s anything wrong with the institution of marriage. i just feel more people need to think before they commit to it. glad you liked my effort. thanks!

jang - point noted. next time i`ll make him open a bag of chips before lighting up. btw does he feel imaginary because he`s too nice to be a guy or because he`s not munching or burping or something? :D
[actually, thats a serious question] thanks for reading!

shobie - i ith again in fithy tank! watch me thwim! ok, i have no idea why i lisped in there... it just seemed like the place to do it. havent seen raincoat but will do so now that i know they ripped my story off :) vaise, what nuance did you draw from that line? thanks for coming by, dude.

nasah - i have no idea what you`re talking about. i`m just glad you came by. thanks!

atif - thankoo! but polyandry aint got nothing to do with it. some of us do stuff just coz we feel like doing it without consulting a higher power. :( of course, we then consult a higher power when the same decision comes back to bite us on the ass but so far sheila`s ass is bite free. and how do you know sheila`s a hindu? she could be christian too.

#11 Posted by JiLaWaTaN on February 28, 2006 7:21:00 pm

I see that as a writer you have alot of potential but these stories seems tobe on evry forum...
But each time itz really nice to read how the different unfaithful couples interact with each other!!all the ``LOVELY and SEXY lines they speak give us guys a lot of hint about how to react and wht to say when a similar situation comes on us!!

#10 Posted by atif2 on February 28, 2006 7:05:40 pm

amrita - you write really well. these kind of articles strike a deeper chord amongst average people than the ones written on chowk with the intent to eradicate world hunger and find cure for cancer.

questions: do you think this injun couple`s predicament has its roots in the hindu tradition of polyandry? and do you think sheila is a poster child for keeping that tradition alive?