Color Me In

Its a wonderfully written piece.Makes one wonder if the person sitting next to us is keeping a secret.I thnk evrybody has a secret.U,me and ppl v know.

Wow , it takes you into another world, I think its beautifully written.

Ah...thanks. Any other takers? I'd like some butchering if you will...although compliments are nice, I thrive on criticism. So bring it.
There are worse prisons than words

Personally, I loved it..a breath of fresh air, if you will.
However, since you "thrive on criticism", and far be it form me to have you perish-it perhaps said too much in too little space. You should have given it more room, if you wanted to do it justice.

Re: # 4
That my friend, is quite true. I was told a book could be weaved around this. But I had a page deadline, which I had to adhere to. But tis true.
There are worse prisons than words

Somehow, I missed reading the story earlier (I blame the chowk’s tampering with the FP interface – one has no clue to what is popping up when on what part of the screen!)

I think it is a well-written story. Good work! :) Its start appears to be quite strong – then it moves a bit too leisurely (for my taste). It left me a bit unsatisfied at the end – as if it was inconclusive. The text could have been trimmed in a few places without taking too much away from the story.

I did not get the connection with the title – but perhaps it is just me! :(

'ello bj.

As for the ending, it was quite conclusive in the initial draft although it's been left open to interpretation in its current state.

Secondly, the title...ahh. I suppose in answer to that question I'd request you to read in between the lines. Look at what hasn't been said, on the relationship between mother and daughter, and what was said and more importantly, what wasn't. Was it a complete picture she had? Or was it just a monochrome portrait?

As for the pace...can't do anything about that I'm afraid. Entirely reader subjective. later.