Bats

interesting original imagery....the imagery associated with the female seem to be very ``wes cravish`` (nightmare on elm street) type...

``her words, rising like hot steam
crawling like worms up his bones``.

some lovely lines.
good poem,

shandana

Aatish:

``people walk by

perhaps in search of their lives

and

when a sleepless night will open its jaws``

`

touched a few chords.

regards

``...his words
untagged keys to hidden locks
hoping to find a match``

Loved this line. Very nicely written. Chowk has given me a new appreciation for poetry because of your work.

Re: Zehra

Thanks. I like that poem too, but without my muse, it would not have been written.

Re: Bina

Thanks. I am a fan of your writing, so the compliment means more. Got to write about something one knows about.

Re: afrasiyab

I am sorry, subtlety is not my forte. I guess my approach to somethings is that of a battering ram, but that is how I perceive them and feel about them. I think somethings need to be screamed out, sometimes.

Re: Shahbaz

Thanks for the remarks. I try to write about something I can relate to, otherwise, it does not resonate. Whether or not I succeed is a fault of my writing ability.

I think haunted can be a very weak way of describing love or lust. It`s really much more than that. It`s a new person within you that you did not know existed, and it can consume you.

Re: Saeed Jaffer

Thank you for your kind words. I am glad that my words can evoke joy/thought/feelings in others, at least some of the time.

God, man!

Why do you have to hit the nail on the head so hard.

This was great. Simple, clean, powerful.

as powerful as your work laila...loved laila.

rizvi