Rehan Rizvi February 18, 1999
#2 Posted by temporal on February 18, 1999 1:17:34 pm
Rehan Rizvi:
Here is my insta-evaluation.
``He was drunk, as I later found out, and I was amazed, not knowing, that he was talking funny more than one can expect of him.`` Not only one gets the impression that Dr. Green was drunk, but the narrator was somewhat inebriated as well. If this is intentional this is brilliant writing bordering on the genius. If not, perhaps you can modify the structure of the sentence.
First person narration is like walking on ice. Looking from the surface one cannot discern if the ice surface is 6 inches or 48 inches thick.
More times than not a person misjudges, and in this narration I`m afraid yaar Rehan.........!
``Is it possible to find someone who`d enjoy Jagjeet and Chitra, Shafiq-ur Rehman, Ghalib and Ibn-e-Safi as well as Mozart, Seinfeld, Shakespeare and Star Trek?`` YES, YES, YES, YES
-----ME! Sadly though, I `ll publicly give the two reasons it cannot work----(1) I prefer the company of the opposite sex and (2) am preoccupied with someone!
Rehan, yaar you show such promise, how can you let this slip by? More on this later if you insist.
regards
Here is my insta-evaluation.
``He was drunk, as I later found out, and I was amazed, not knowing, that he was talking funny more than one can expect of him.`` Not only one gets the impression that Dr. Green was drunk, but the narrator was somewhat inebriated as well. If this is intentional this is brilliant writing bordering on the genius. If not, perhaps you can modify the structure of the sentence.
First person narration is like walking on ice. Looking from the surface one cannot discern if the ice surface is 6 inches or 48 inches thick.
More times than not a person misjudges, and in this narration I`m afraid yaar Rehan.........!
``Is it possible to find someone who`d enjoy Jagjeet and Chitra, Shafiq-ur Rehman, Ghalib and Ibn-e-Safi as well as Mozart, Seinfeld, Shakespeare and Star Trek?`` YES, YES, YES, YES
-----ME! Sadly though, I `ll publicly give the two reasons it cannot work----(1) I prefer the company of the opposite sex and (2) am preoccupied with someone!
Rehan, yaar you show such promise, how can you let this slip by? More on this later if you insist.
regards
#1 Posted by Amin Saleh on February 18, 1999 9:58:14 am
I hate to be the one to start of with the replies. However, here it goes. I loved your piece on love especially where it is attempted to translate love from feeling to verbal expressions.
Futhermore, I liked simplistic rules eg.Rule #1: Don`t fall in love with strangers. Get to know the person first. Its interesting suggestion that you can know the person in a short while. It presupposes that a person, once you discover him/her, will never change in his or her life. Finally, it presupposes that all possible faceuts of a person can be discovered in a short period, period.
Interesting the person you love can never be perfect and in order to have a sustained relationship it is important that you are completely devolved with one aspect and in the future when one has second thoughts he should refocus on the aspect that made you fall in love in the first instance.
And I loved the file closed ending as the head wins over heart. And race, culture and religion taking precedence over love at first sight.
Futhermore, I liked simplistic rules eg.Rule #1: Don`t fall in love with strangers. Get to know the person first. Its interesting suggestion that you can know the person in a short while. It presupposes that a person, once you discover him/her, will never change in his or her life. Finally, it presupposes that all possible faceuts of a person can be discovered in a short period, period.
Interesting the person you love can never be perfect and in order to have a sustained relationship it is important that you are completely devolved with one aspect and in the future when one has second thoughts he should refocus on the aspect that made you fall in love in the first instance.
And I loved the file closed ending as the head wins over heart. And race, culture and religion taking precedence over love at first sight.
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