Where am I?

Mashallah....very heart touching....by the way where can i find this pure soul....?oh...i will be the first to follow u Rehan.........! I really loved the poem...it`s very meaningful...so keep writing and KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.....

hamidm #15

[Oh Lord why ? .... why do I have to suffer - first fools, then Indians, and now poets ?]

---Divorce, Tolerance, Enlightment?

rgds

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Quite right Scout. I apologize to the author. In truth though the poetic merits of this work may be not to my taste, the sentiment behind them is enriching and he is courageous for sharing them. Certainly his efforts are more gutsy than those of us who do not write at all.

Oh Lord why ? .... why do I have to suffer - first fools, then Indians, and now poets ?

thanks Rehan !

for showing us light...

i am a very optimist person so like u said !!

I see a light

I feel that I can change the world and put it right

So please God give me strength and help me fight

The darkness and the evil so that the world is pure and bright

And YES I am here, where I will strive until my last night..!!

criticism is cruel :)

Remember in the school magazine who everyone would write to poor little me poems? That is what this one is like. My dear chap, you have a talent for prose but the poetic medium escapes you. Chalk this one up to a learning experience....

re:

/ * where the mosques and the church halls

are all empty because the greed calls

*/

Whenever I have to go to the `mosques or church halls` I meet all the greedy ones there asking for more and more

hmm! its not poor delivery, its very very poor delivery..stick to prose rehan...

positive thoughts, poor delivery. this reminds me of when i was a teacher and my boss told me `the answer might not be very well written, but atleast he tried`. so...in that tone...keep it up!

shandana

wow...this sucked.

temporal, how could you??
ps. check your email...im back :))

rizvi.

*Beautiful
* *Inspirational
* * *Touching
* * * *Jolting
* * * * *Revolting
* * * * * *Promising
* * * * * * *Humbling

Last but not least, your last stanza reminds me of a verse, that I`ve heard since my childhood from my beloved father, and happened to see in person, engraved outside the mausoleum of one of my dearest poets - Hazrat Waris Shah (Late). Very silently, but sweetly it said:

Nice effort here.

Ras

The message was clear and good.

But did each line have to rhyme with the previous?

Anyway, to each his own.

Good poem overall.

Hey nice effort...conveyed your message in full.

cheers.

Taimur.

Rehan:

Welcome to Chowk.

Nice flowing effort --- eternal queries --- no easy answers ---save striving.

Would individual striving make a difference? Depends.

Depends if one calls a glass half-full or half-empty. But try we must or we’d be dead wood.

regards,

temporal