Banyan Tree

Jawahara:

Really nice. I loved the way, you describe things.

But why do most of your stories have sad endings?

Satyavadi

Jawahara,

You write beautifully, and it is always a pleasure to read your stories. However they have a tendency to become like american highways: very pretty, but so straight that driving on them puts one to sleep. I would recommend that you put some ``twist in your tale`` so that they don`t become too predictable.

narain

wowzers!

RE: Temporal

I am just kidding yaar. You know that I am always on your side ;) ustaad ji.

Urstruly #5:

[I wish I hadnt read the replies before going to the article. Now you have scared me with the idea of reading 42 paragraphs:-o]

That is not fair to the author! You must read the story, form your own views and then come here and share with us. Then we can have a honest exchange of views.

I strongly feel like withholding my comments till the interacts reach double digits. Should I do that?

rgds,

t

RE: Temporal #3

I wish I hadnt read the replies before going to the article. Now you have scared me with the idea of reading 42 paragraphs:-o

PS: Please read `the Rupa character` in the second last paragraph.

Jawahara:

Having read this story my first impulse was to write a cryptic one word or one sentence comment like Ras does and move on. But that would not be me. And you deserve an honest feedback.

Right from the second word ‘unraveled’ I felt cheated --- no --- that is too harsh a word -- I felt let down.

There must be hints if not explanation for her behavior. And if there were, I must confess I missed them today.

The landscape, the horizon and the banyan tree descriptions were wonderful. At times I felt the tree was too central --- more than the Rupa ---perhaps I missed the whole point and the tree was central?

Except for a typo in para 7 the rest was blemish free --- other than the irritating breaks in paragraphs 7, 20, 27, 34, 39 and 42 for which like last time you will forgive me :)

love,

t

Jawahara:

It was a pleasure reading your work after such a long time! It was a nice, and a needed, break from the articles about the orphans of TNT!

Ciao!

Is it just me or do other people also translate such stories in Urdu/Hindi in their heads while reading? Which brings me to another question: What do u mean when u make Rupa`s mother say, listen to me ``It is written in the laws``? ¿¿