Porn for Girls

Mahim,

I am sure there must have been more depth in this piece , but somehow it just went whoooosh !six feet above my head !

I dont see channel 40 in any case so just could not relate !!

take care

shirin

This strip-tease was a sad attempt to look like a radical.Please reconsider.

#9 ``understands`` a lot,such kinds extend lots of officious welcomes too,to recruit to their own mindsets.

The genuine ones have turned even that into an art.At least they do not seek approval as the ``respected`` ones.

Fahmeeda Riaz is an insult to female chromosomes,let alone urdu poetry.

Please try to live up to the respect & glory of the Taimurees(if your first name is any indication.)

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wassalaam

Mahim,
Interesting work that will not be easily digested
by the readership here on CHOWK. When I was younger and reading such fantasy work was more important I could perhaps relate better. But in the absence of subtitles and the much needed author explanations that appear to be needed here, I have to resort to speculation.
Are you trying to emulate Fahmida Riaz here whose ``Meray aur tumharay beech, is neeli chadar kay siwa kuch bhi to nahi....`` by using tantalizing symbolism here to say something else or completely different from porn?

Ras

Mahim,

Nice & simple yet evocative & layered. Like it!

Funny thing is, such a harmless pretty little string of thought is going to ruffle some feathers on the baggage belabored backs of these relics!

But something tells me you don`t give a rat`s.

Keep writing.

Re: Asim

Jeez, Asim, lighten up. Aren`t you giving me YOUR version of right and wrong. There is nothing wrong with 16 year old female virgins sticking their fingers for it in a place full of 35 year old sexual retard Men who don`t know the A.B.C of sex.

I surely would want to contribute now...

it makes three crappy submissions now..

I can write as bad as this...actually even worse:)

knocking at the editor`s door

thorn for [editorial] guys

what the hell is this?

Is this the contribution you want to make to Pakistan after returning from your ``foreign education``, where you wroite you wanted to give something back to Pakistan. So the ifrst poem was in spanish, the next is in erotica. Wonder-bloody-ful.

You were probably better off staying back here than returning back to Pakistan to add to the chaos, by giving ideas to ``gullible`` young 16 year old female virgins about the benefits of self gratification. Oops! maybe i have been away too long to actually make a factual statement on the status quo, so convincingly.

Asim

Banging my door down........emphasis is on the word ``BANGING`` hmmmmmm, sounds ironic to me.

I see the face of Mahim

with whom I merge

not almost but more



In flagarante

dear Mahim the ante

has been upped



please stop the porn

the buildings torn

under a heavy Friday noon

full of beardo`ns.

Is this the complete porn, I mean poem, or half of it is eaten by cyber-genie?