Porn for Girls

Is this the complete porn, I mean poem, or half of it is eaten by cyber-genie?

I see the face of Mahim

with whom I merge

not almost but more



In flagarante

dear Mahim the ante

has been upped



please stop the porn

the buildings torn

under a heavy Friday noon

full of beardo`ns.

Banging my door down........emphasis is on the word ``BANGING`` hmmmmmm, sounds ironic to me.

Is this the contribution you want to make to Pakistan after returning from your ``foreign education``, where you wroite you wanted to give something back to Pakistan. So the ifrst poem was in spanish, the next is in erotica. Wonder-bloody-ful.

You were probably better off staying back here than returning back to Pakistan to add to the chaos, by giving ideas to ``gullible`` young 16 year old female virgins about the benefits of self gratification. Oops! maybe i have been away too long to actually make a factual statement on the status quo, so convincingly.

Asim

what the hell is this?

I surely would want to contribute now...

it makes three crappy submissions now..

I can write as bad as this...actually even worse:)

knocking at the editor`s door

thorn for [editorial] guys

Re: Asim

Jeez, Asim, lighten up. Aren`t you giving me YOUR version of right and wrong. There is nothing wrong with 16 year old female virgins sticking their fingers for it in a place full of 35 year old sexual retard Men who don`t know the A.B.C of sex.

Mahim,

Nice & simple yet evocative & layered. Like it!

Funny thing is, such a harmless pretty little string of thought is going to ruffle some feathers on the baggage belabored backs of these relics!

But something tells me you don`t give a rat`s.

Keep writing.

Mahim,
Interesting work that will not be easily digested
by the readership here on CHOWK. When I was younger and reading such fantasy work was more important I could perhaps relate better. But in the absence of subtitles and the much needed author explanations that appear to be needed here, I have to resort to speculation.
Are you trying to emulate Fahmida Riaz here whose ``Meray aur tumharay beech, is neeli chadar kay siwa kuch bhi to nahi....`` by using tantalizing symbolism here to say something else or completely different from porn?

Ras

This strip-tease was a sad attempt to look like a radical.Please reconsider.

#9 ``understands`` a lot,such kinds extend lots of officious welcomes too,to recruit to their own mindsets.

The genuine ones have turned even that into an art.At least they do not seek approval as the ``respected`` ones.

Fahmeeda Riaz is an insult to female chromosomes,let alone urdu poetry.

Please try to live up to the respect & glory of the Taimurees(if your first name is any indication.)

__________________________________________________

wassalaam

Mahim,

I am sure there must have been more depth in this piece , but somehow it just went whoooosh !six feet above my head !

I dont see channel 40 in any case so just could not relate !!

take care

shirin

Mahim, I did not comment on your previous work, but I thought it was inventive and imaginative, a breath of fresh air.

I really liked this one as well. Passionately delicate, sensual. Well done! I am sure you are going to madden some chowkies with this, but that`s half the fun sometimes.

Asim, why is it so hard to digest that 16 year old virgins are *gasp * sexual creatures too? It`s a fact of life. Or is that only reserved for 16 year old (and up) guys who can leer at, touch and violate others. Better self gratification than molestation or even actually having sex at that age.

Mahim,

I took the liberty of altering your poem a bit, here`s my version of it:

And just as I feel my

end is near

when I almost merge

with the two onscreen...

...Urstruly is there,

banging

my

door

down.

I try to ignore him

but he drags me by the hair

and throws me out the window

as I fall to the ground

he shouts to me

badchalan badzaat behuda aurat

tu isi laiq hai

:)

sorry

I hope the writer is either very famous, a known writer/journalist/author/critic, or is operating at a literary level far above the comprehension of us literary mortals.

If not, then this piece is a waste of disk space on the Chowk server.

=== Interact Filtered ===
view this users filtered interacts

Scout# 13

hummm! that was interesting. My barber says that almost all women fantacize about sadist men. Unfortunately I am not. In addition I am pot-bellied, half-bald, couch potato. When I sit on my computer chair for my cyber-jihad against hindus, 20% of my behind hangs on the sides of the chair. I am not a good fantasy either. Try to forget me.