An Ode to Chowk

I must say that it is a beautiful poem, specially the words rhyme very well & the metaphors are well placed as well.

Bina I am Feroz`s wife & I think that you have captured his personality really well.

As a grand finale:

CHOWK, if there was an award that was to be given
for the best writing during this time of poetic
expression my vote would go to


``The Nature of Time and Snarling Dogs`` By
Saeed Urrehman (CHOWK 3-25-01).


We had some good and bad poetry this whole
week, but ``Snarling Dogs`` is certainly a
candidate for some poetic competition and could
win for sheer content.
Waiting to hear from temporal on this one ...


Ras

well done Bina...but Im glad this poetry (read painful)mania on Chowk is finally going away...=o)

Re: Bina

Bina that was great! I think that you have captured Chowk`s spirit really well!

Ciao!

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Re : self #5

Note to self:

I should heed my freeely disbursed advice too. :)

nice one Bina, as usual, write something bad for a change :) ...

now may we PLEASEEEEEEEEEE have the old chowk back.

too much of anything can be harmful. i`m sure i don`t speak for myself only when i say that i`ve had it with this poetry week.

Re : URstruly

``Grand finale? Why?``

This was done in the interests of human empathy and for restricting the pain inflicted on humanity, so unabashedly by these so called Pakistani Byrons. Chowk did not want to be associated with other Sadist organisations, specialising in leather and chains. :)

Folks, (except Bina and that binifer lass), please stick to prose. And if you cant do that, its better to not say too much less you are taken for a complete nincompoop. Methinks, enough said!

Sincerely,

Asim

Very nice and very true.

Grand finale? Why?

If this is a zoo indeed

I think the beasts need

To be fettered even within a cage

Never mind what they do on the page.

Some work their ass off, I am told,

Only to sound like good gentlemen of old.

Then there are the critters

Who get the jitters

They work up their hormones

And talk about pogroms.

Tell a Paki a Hindu name

And he will go pulling dhotis without any shame

The Indians, mind you, are no less

They still think the Partition was for their best!

Yet both sides want a piece of the fun

Alas, it comes in the shape of a gun.

Yeah, baby, you are right

Kashmir is what gets us going alright

If you think I am only judging the rest

Okay, okay, I know I too am part of the junglee

fest.

I often get hot under the collar, but what to do?

Jism do hain, aur ek hi rooh…

I wish at times I had been more restrained

But, what the hell, I wasn’t trained.

Besides, no one has spared me, you will agree

How I wish they would love me and say helloji!

Anyway, thank you Chowk for showing me the way

Now I know I will find Satan here – and that will be the day!

``And let`s not forget our friends from across the border

Who so quickly remember to put us in order

When we become a little too big for our britches

We can always enjoy calling each other sons of bitches``

Bina,

It has been so far the most interesting peom this week. The baive was priceless!

You are alright! :)

Asim

blue white

flashes of light

break the visual silence

of a december dawn

a knock on the door

`he is no more`

...tears turn inward

silent screams echo inside

a facade of calmness

hides an internal storm

...coroner`s office

warm kiss on a cold cheek

mouth slightly open

in eternal sleep

...please wake up and smile

your mischievous smile

...please come home and tell us

it was all just a joke

...it`s not too late

the door`s open

your bed is made

come in and sleep

and wake up again

like you were never dead