A Nocturnal Battle

Mahim,

Was ``Malaria `` the inspiration behind this piece ?

hope they wern`t the Anopheles variety !!

:) sa

Mahim:

...Noctunral?...nah...more like a diurnal revenge:)

...are we into cleaning our drawers once every so often also...or have we given in to the sophistic imbeciles` wail...neither seem good enough reason...but it is a poem!...suppose I should be grateful to chowk for that...

lve

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Well it all depends. If this is meant as a subtle paraody of pseudo intellectual tripe it is a fine piece of work. If, on the other hand, it is not, then it is mere pseudo intellectual tripe. Eh?

Those vicious ``Macchars`` of Pakistan are not
very easily defeated. The are a truly formidable force.

Ras

Wow Mahim you are really bored in Pakistan aren`t you buddy : )

Peace.

Mosquitoes are Kamakazi warriors.

Yeah, tell me about it ...(buzzzzzz)

I fail to see this poem (Ouch) as anything other than what it is...(scratch, scratch)

Die machar, Die!!

Sounds like a sexual encounter to me!!

why this hubbub about blood sucking?? shudnt it be the other way round :)

good effort

bugger off

Mahim

``Perhaps blood is their desire``

- That about sums up the Indo-Pak relation, as evident by certain posts to Sameer`s article.

``as I lie half asleep, aware only by the approaching warning their wings make``

- I wonder if that`s how the innocent women, for no fault of their own, who get raped in ``wars`` feel.

``as another victorious warrior makes off, satisfied, full of my life force``

- Am I wrong for seeing in your poem what I saw?

Your poem has a lot deeper meaning to it than it appears.

Godot`s interpretation was a revelation to me. It`s great to see that the poem stretches itself.

I didn`t realise that the sexual undertones were that strong for so many. Thanks Bina.

Don`t take it too far interpreting this writing. I believe the poem was inspired by a warm mucky night in Karachi maybe during load-shedding!!!

Well, when the poet uses words like

bed
desire
mouths
soft
sheath
skin
satisfied
life force

it`s hard to NOT think about the undertones!!! Mosquitos are a clever metaphor. HOWEVER I do know that one can write something and think it only means one thing, only to have others decipher other meanings from it. That`s the fun of poetry - more complex than you`d think.

Mahim

Dont you just love those readers who discover such meanings in your work that never ever occured in your wildest dreams.

Bina; I may have a crude yet simple explanation for your rendition - i.e. metaphorically the same reasons as to why a thirsty traveler sees a mirage (normally an oasis) in the desert.

Nice poem.

I will be rude and give you a suggestion that make more sense in my own well.

``Intra-venous`` sticks out as if it does not belong to your very short meter: you might want to use a different word.

And the end ``full of my life force...`` is very subtle, very beautiful. I have read a couple of your poems before and this is much better than the rest.

If you want to continue writing in this style, you might want to read Antonio Machado (If you haven’t already).

Enjoy writing