3 Haikus

Hello Zinnia,

Your meter of Haikus is wrong.
It should be 5,7,5 words or as in Japanese letters.

Nichiro

addenda:to post # 95---as a PS.

Before this recedes into the memory bank.

A confession:

I,hamzad afaqui wrote this haiku.Did not take more than 30 seconds.

Heck,even the Japanese name is a concocted one--kind of Japanese sounding.I made that up too---I hope & pray nothing offensive happened to Japani knower.

Actually I like this one by Koi Nagata:

A catfish laughs.

It thinks of other catfishes

In other ponds.

But for the rest us (including me) falling over to write haikus:

Haiku kai-ku bol

Teri-ku aur kuch ata bol

Aur na kar bore

tahmed saab

“saminashah #82 Glad you liked the Panjabi Haiku. What the heck, here comes another one starring not one but two good ole boys:

Janab Afaqu

Likhhan Panjabi Haiku

12-Singha nachhay

I took the trouble of making it 5-7-5 syllables, thus passing the grammer test for Haiku. Hope Hamzad and Aamir&Co appreciate this effort I put into immortalizing them in verse. And in Hamzad`s politically correct language too!”

….LOL…. ….guess you don’t have to worry about losing your day job….

To those who extended to me undeserved recognition,referring specifically by name:

``Thank you``----the mirror is really miraculous.It reflects the truth.

A sliver of moon

a silvern cloud

Silence is golden

Akira yashamoto

aicha:As You say sir!

How can MUsharaff just give away support for Kashmir .DO YOU THINK THIS IS BOOLYWOOD LAAGAAN MOVIE ,THAT AAMIR KHAN WILL PLAN A UPSET WIN OF INDIA BY WRITING THE SCRIPT .INDIANS HAVE BEEN WATCHING BOLLYWOOD MAKE BELIEVE ,FEEL GOOD,WISHFULL THING, MOVIES FOR FAR TOO LONG

saminashah #82 Glad you liked the Panjabi Haiku. What the heck, here comes another one starring not one but two good ole boys:

Janab Afaqu

Likhhan Panjabi Haiku

12-Singha nachhay

I took the trouble of making it 5-7-5 syllables, thus passing the grammer test for Haiku. Hope Hamzad and Aamir&Co appreciate this effort I put into immortalizing them in verse. And in Hamzad`s politically correct language too!

Prem - gotcha (i think) !! - aicha

re: saminashah

{How is Singapore?}

singapore`s hot-n-humid and characterless, as it has always been...but it doesn`t matter much b.c. i`ve been in the office most of the time...

{You know my previous comments were directed at the duo...}

phew, ok good..else i`d have to get off this board in a hurry...my poetic sensibilities extend as far as appreciating the rhyming of rap artists, but no further :)

hydra

WRITTIN ANY PLARgaRIZWED POEMS ORWORN AnY BURQAS LATILY ???!!!?????!!!??

Ref hydra #: 85

[DeliciousKarachi

DONT I HAVE A BROTHER

ISNT HIS WIFE BORN IN PAKISTAN]

Delicious Karachi, I am deeply sorry we seem to have inflicted a moron (hydra`s brother) on your country. I do hope Pakistan doesn`t grant citizenship to husbands of its citizens. We can deal with hydra and his household zoo better in India.

Ref hydra #: 76

[Dont try to mention dissociation personality ,etc etc pretending as professional when you didnt go to EVEN a 3rd world country med.School!!!!!!!!]

I wouldn`t go to med school anywhere, even in the First World.

All your answers can be found in the PDR.

Not so if you want to design the Golden Gate Bridge, the 747 jetliner, the Pentium chip or some elegant program. Or, write a haiku.

By the way, you do need one medical procedure performed on you.

Get your head removed from your a$$ where it has been shoved up.

Rsax,

How is Singapore? You know my previous comments were directed at the duo...

soysauce, aicha, urstruly

Let me take this op. to make my position clear...(can I ever resist?)

Interactors have the right not to like a poem or poetry; therefore if an interactor writes, ``didn`t do anything for me``, that`s cool. It`s an opinion and a legitimate one. I`d rather that happening, because it means the interactor is reading and trying to engage with the writing on an honest level.

If interactor B writes, ``this is sensual because...``, that`s interesting as well, because a lot of good things in life are sensual; using one`s senses. Drinking a glass of water can be a sensual act; the tactile feel of the glass, the coldish glass against one`s lips, the silk flow of water in one`s mouth...in fact, one would be false in not acknowledging that each day consists of millions of sensual acts.

Sensuality is distinct from sexuality; sometimes both work hand in hand. Other times sensuality is present, while sexuality is in another room checking the weather online. It would be ill-informed to confuse the two.

Sexuality is an undeniable component of many great poems regardless culture, time, or place.

There are a few Chowkies who are clearly uncomfortable with this kind of energy in poems posted by Chowk writers. Thats fine, whatever floats your boat...but to mock the poem, deny its accomplishments, craft and skill, say that the art form has no merit and then bait people who enjoy this art form with stupid comments; thats when I get igged.

Zinnia`s haikus were really good on intellectual, artistic, sensual, and sexual levels. These interpretations are all there, should the reader be inclined to make them. I just get annoyed by the cheap and stereotypical comments that the duo makes... guess they should be read for comic relief and pity their spouses...

My apologies if I offended anyone outside the duo...

re: saminashah

{because you don`t actually KNOW any haikus}

ouch, not so harsh please...i don`t know any haikus either :(

aicha # 75

aicha - here`s your quotation under Occam`s razor

``Don`t fatten.``

Aeisha dear - surely you jest !!