The Late Eid Present

rozaiba:
awwww. honesty is the best policy afterall. :-) After all little rozy went through, i should hope he would get to keep the money! ;-)

why did rozaiba need Rs.50 to buy lunch?? emphasis on ``Rs.50``.

cute story :)

Good job!

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Sweet.

There appear to be a number of subtle messages within this story.

But the ``late Eid present`` dominates.

Good Job.

Ras

(Whats up with Spring Break? San Jose State this Saturday?)

Nice one!

`Acche baccho,` says nani jaan, while all the bean-pole kids gather around her. `The moral of the istory is:

`Honesty is the best policy because honesty pays...literally!`

Umer M

PS. Dishonesty is the best foreign policy because dishonesty pays also.

Wondering if theres any difference between Mr. Hashmi and friend of Rozaiba, both sound similar... ‘Think of it as a late Eid present!’

after a long series of war.something nice .thanx rozaiba

Rozaiba:

...nicely captured slice of idealism from the eight year old`s perspective...


...if adults retain a tenth of that idealism this world would be a much better place...

rgds,

t

Since when did eight year old`s start getting Rs.50 for lunch? Must be some burger lunch[pun intended]. And the bullies were a bunch of sour losers; how could they not notice the Rs.50 coupons in ragtag Rozy`s hand?

Atleast the story had a happy ending.

Cheers.

Rozaiba:
Simple and `pure`... somewhat Kahlil Gibranish, without the obvious philosophical overtones...or maybe a deeper Chicken Soup...heck, just very you perhaps!

I had always thought that Rozaiba was a 25-30 year old woman.

(meaning that the posts were mature and soft)

Bat, moulabux, studebaker, thanks for comments:

A friend in LA asked me to write a story that could be used in a book for kids in this muslim kids school in LA. Thus there was no emphasis on any one setting or anything. I guess I should have clarified, but what the lunch cost is so insignificant. Perhaps Rozaiba bought a pack of coupons that were supposed to last him and his brother for the entire week? Who cares? Fifty and One hundred are nice fat numbers more easily understood. If I were to get particular, when I was in second grade, what i got from home for lunch was a `chawanee` or `attainee` for a slice of naan with a spoonful of chanay in the middle. those don`t exist anymore. And why wait till tomorrow to return the money? If a kid can believes he can run and clear his ‘conscious’ today, why wait till tomorrow?

But it shows though that you read this closely :) I submitted this story to my short story writing class yesterday and got grilled on it :)

Ana: yes, my creative writing teacher joked that it would not be a kids story if rozaiba got eaten up by the dog or died or got no ‘reward’ for his efforts.

Scout: you were supposed to do a thorough analysis of this.

Ansari: aap ke duain hain. And since I am no more in the mood to continue the prank, I’ll let you know that I colluded with another prankster to spice up your life by letting you listen in to a make-believe lovers phone conversation (the one where the milkman came in the way :) ) . but technically I told the truth- ‘I’ didn’t make the call. But we could tell you were enjoying it. Haha.

rozy, pls share your lunch money with me...i used to get two rupees, finally progressed to ten rupees after Super Crisp chips became expensive...good story! :D