I Recall

Sattar, Mhamid, Nooralain

Cheers.

#43
`never realizing his poem was really the worst`

ahhh, after reading your jingle, i`m not so sure that`s altogether true. oh, but fik`r not, it might just work with a quartet of red-faced drunken men at a pub. the music to it is being composed as i write this.

zeeshan,
is the end quote from ghost in the shell part of your piece, or is it what inspired you to write this? this reads more like a monologue to me than a poem. i can`t remember from our previous conversation when i first saw this whether you had told me this was a prose poem or not...perhaps it was the other piece. *confused*

there are parts that i thought i got when i first read this, but after a few rereads, i`m thinking perhaps you might need to rework them? i won`t impose myself and tell you how, but you know there are always ways to improve on a piece structurally. i like the subject that you write of. . .and i like how you write about it. certain phrases stay with me. as for the cliche`s...well no one is immune from using them. there`s nothing wrong with writing for one`s self, but the important thing is that you be true to yourself. when you share what you write for yourself with others, you no longer are just writing for yourself.

and at the risk of sounding auntyish, which i know i tend to do. . . there is definitely much to be said for rising above criticism. it is easier to resort to namecalling and insults than it is to be reasonable, or just walk away. i hope that if you do continue here at chowk, that you will be able to just walk away because in the end it`s not really worth it. we are not a monolithic force here at chowk, zee, and you already know that by getting to know some of us. people are different, some people are difficult, and we don`t all share the same views. i`m not suggesting you think we do, but disagreements do not always have to end up in cruel insults that you dish out, or that you take. it really does take away from the work you put up here when that happens, and that shouldn`t happen, with anyone.
and the library is closing in five very short minutes, as my favorite announcer says, so i`ve got to run. thank you for taking the time to read this. and keep writing!
love,
n~

Zeeshan,

that`s alright man ... the first half of the writing that I managed to struggle through ... I could not comprehend ...

... but don`t take any criticism too seriously ... it`s just that ... criticism ... no big deal.
So roll with the punches ... and keep pushing through the sludge and gunk ...

very nice. can we trash it now. Please?

there was once a boy called potty mouth
who wanted to write a poem
he tried not to rhyme
he tried to be clever
but he ended up being booooorrrinnnggg

so when everyone commented on his work
he became defensive and cursed
never realizing his poem was really the worst
who will save potty mouth from further humiliation?
look at the his sick creation!
is this a poem, i ask
is this a piece of prose?
hanging his head in shame
there potty mouth goes!


P.S: chowk staff, you might want to publish this on the front page :D

err..errr.....too much imagination needed...I dont have any..sorry!

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Dear Zeeshan:

I switched to Urdu because evidently English is not your forte. (If you force a monkey to eat a thesaurus, its shit will look like what you wrote above.) You might be Shakespeare inside the offices of a third-rate tabloid like MAG. Please don`t let that get to your head. You`re still a blithering idiot.

MNI

airy-fairy,

``rules and regulations``? Like comprehensibility? Hey, I`m all for breaking the rules...but be woman/man enough to understand the risks...

It would be nice to read the article discussed more in terms of its content than its anatomy as a candidate for some essay competition.

Abay where is the content?

apna kaha khud aap samjheiN ya pari samjhay

Airy:
Which content are you talking about? Sach sach bataao what has he bribed you with.

apna kaha khud aap samjheiN ya khuda samjhay

or maybe..pari samjhay

#33

``English muthafucka do you speak it?`` - Pulp Fiction

#34

Stuttering?

Ha well, never mind.

You ain`t seen nothing yet. Speaking of read-between-the-lines, you should read One Last Love Song when it comes up. It`s not perfect because any writer can see a mass of problems in his or her own work even after the ``final cut``, but I`m pleased with the information and opinions I left in the subtext.

Cheers.

Zee: No matter what people say, this was a good read, a nice workout for the brain, a tingling sensation for all those neurons that are not otherwise stimulated easily. Though I was somewhat surprised by the responses. Maybe I expected more of a mature feedback from the chowk interactors. By this article, one would think, people ought to know the difference between critiquing and criticizing. But that makes it all the more interesting. However, what I don`t get is how one can not understand the article, whatever happened to reading between the lines and getting to the core of the material without getting lost in the maze of words. I guess, sometimes we are just too occupied with rules and regulations, that we forget about the primary purpose of writing, which is to express one`s self. I was also reminded of the whole messenger-message deal, only, in this case, we are not trying to kill the messenger, we are frowning at him because apparently he stutters! No offense meant, Zee. Just keep writing for yourself and keep sharing. For it`s what you write for yourself that turns out to be the best sometimes.

P.S. It would be nice to read the article discussed more in terms of its content than its anatomy as a candidate for some essay competition. But I guess people have already exhausted themselves doing the earlier, so I won`t get my hopes high, or should I say I’ll try not `to get high on my own supply`!

It wrote itself.
I enjoyed writing it and most of you are just ejaculating over all those months of hate.
Thank you for reading even if you were biased.

Abay is this an article or the diary from ``Harry Potter: The Chamber of Secrets``?

Then you say you enjoyed writing it. Abay stick to one story. Did you write it or it wrote itself?

MNI
PS: Do YOU ejaculate often on the computer?

Tsk tsk so u can dish it out but can`t take it....obviously ur masculine ejaculations have more merit than comedic female ejaculations