When I see you again

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Dear Sirosh,

This is a lovely poem. Anyone who has lost someone near and dear knows that nothing in the world can make up for the loss and the grief. Quoting a famous urdu verse:

``Mohabbat karne wale kum na hon gay
Teri mehfil mein lekin hum na hon gay
Tu agar ittefaqan mil bhi jaye
teri furqat ke sadme kam na hon gay``

I feel that the reunion, if ever, will be more as silence and warm tears staining our faces and of course a very deep rooted but only heartfelt joy. Noone and nothing can heal the scars of death upon a family. May God help everyone in times of sorrow and grief. Amen.


Bless you, always.

A

Happiness, sadness, silence....

When I see you again,
Will it be a moment of disbelief
will it be a moment of distrust
will it be a moment of calm


Read somewhere, the bankruptcy of a soul that expends too much on hope and expectation.

sincerely
Janu

When I see you again,
Will it be a moment of silence?
Silence for fate’s ruthless course

most probably, this one, silence Or Its just, you only see what your eyes want to see?.
cool one.

and I enjoyed the original One more than the 33 words shorter but Nice effort. I really loved the one by T, wrote for FEROZ, someway back in his iLOG plus few more.

Thanks temporal for your feedback but I think that the repitition of the words, `happiness`, `sadness` and `silence` helps create the depth with which these emotions are felt and at the same time put them forward as questions, as yet unanswered...

Thanks Dreamz, oxygen, s2 and Suzie lightning, for the feedback. I appreciate your opinion of my work.

Sirosh

Happiness...Sadness....Silence...Nice Blend :)

matter for both future and the past, charished the memories and made things thougthful..good words

heart wrenching. Thanks.

Beautiful words, Sirosh.

Sirosh:

...will you forgive this minimalist if from the 108 words he takes away 33?

When I see you again,
Will it be a moment of happiness?
For life resurrected, souls reunited,
For rekindled warmth to last…

When I see you again,
Will it be a moment of sadness?
For the time elapsed, the tears shed,
The grief unshared, the wounds that bled,
deep and desolate…

When I see you again,
Will it be a moment of silence?
For fate’s ruthless course,
For all words unsaid,
Silence, bleak and bottomless…

rgds,

t