Prudent Rosy Knew My Vital Signs

ps) shouldn`t the last line of the song `dau pal ka` be: haaro gay `tabhi` tum ko mazza aay ga jeet ka...?

Urstruly:

Finally another good story by you! Wonderful tale. Absolutely enjoyed the intertwining lyrics of the Vital Signs. They honored Sami, and you honored them well : )

Right out of cheap third-rate URDU romantic novels and in the mold of Khawteen Digest Afsanas(short stories).

The influence of cheap romantic Indian/Pakistani movies is too obvious.

My former wife would have loved it. Thanks God! I am out of her romantic reach now!!!!

My current wife would say “A man writing love stories! Must be gay!!”

The style is so feminine that I am beginning to wonder…A San Francisco connection perhaps….

Very, very interesting way of using those Vital Signs lines. Well constructed Urstruly.

#3 HP
What were you doing reading the Khuwateen Digest? And the way you`ve described your new wife, sounds like she`s pretty fond of that leather, bull whip and hand-cuff thingie. By the way, your post reminds me of the Nazi era Berlin Mens Masturbation Club connection.

Urstruly,
Fantastic piece. In fact one can say it`s a unique way reviewing a Vital Signs album. Nice going.

PS: HP, don`t you f**king get into a war of words with me. Your wife will regret even allowing your insecure macho shit here.

urstruly.. not half as good as your earlier pieces but still a fun read.. are u chachoo or mamaji to rozys kids? cheers :)

Urstruly:
Dil ko kayee kahaaniaaN, yaad cee aa ke reh gaee-N

Your story is a true tafseer of Faiz`s: dO ishque and some casablanca.

JavaaN lahoo kee pur-usraar shah rah-On pur
chalay jo yaar tO daaman pey kitnay haath puRRay

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Thanks a lot for some gusts of cold winds which blew through me while I was reading this.
Very cathhartic!

Guzur chukee hai yeh fasl-e bahaar hum pur bhhee.


P.S:while do-gooders like us worked for a better time & place, the pragmatic-ones were having a good time at a better place..or so they thought, we thought!

In retrospect, nothing matters. All a game , a bazeechaa-itfaal.
Except! that perhaps you and I are richer & have more fortune than others;)


Avval O aakhir fanaa,
Baatin-O zahir fanaa
Kaar-e jahaaN bay sabaat
Kaar-e jahaaN bay sabaat

#5 by trashman

Pooch!! Pooch!!! Puppy!

“PS: HP, don`t you f**king get into a war of words with me. Your wife will regret even allowing your insecure macho shit here.”

Sounds so cute from another wrong one!!!

“she`s pretty fond of that leather, bull whip and hand-cuff thingie”

How did you know she is dominatrix? That sadomasochistic btch just loves pretty little boys!!!!

I would just love a threesome myself. Your place or our place?????

Captivating. And the paragraph about that man-woman moment, that was brilliant.

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are u chachoo or mamaji to rozys kids? cheers :)
#6 by i-am-the-cheese

Kuraidtay ho jo ubb raakh, justjoo kyaa hai?

Beautiful..
..Like the songs of Vital Signs...luv them !! :)

...fluid begining and interesting middle, the end sort of spoiled the narration by getting into forced details....well composed nevertheless.

mr. truly,

this was warm, amusing and interesting to read. i enjoyed it. thank you. will not comment on the typos because its your own work, not a translation and you have no obligation to another writer.

Urstruly,

This was an engaging and romantic read.

Kindly excuse my lack of understanding the nature of the romantic flow here.

Why did Rosy or Tiffany marry someone else ? I couldn`t comprehend that part very well.

On the one end, this is a romantic piece; but on the other end, it brings out a sad component. That component deals with the pressure women go through to take major steps of their life without their own willingness. How can you think of marrying someone because of someone else`s expectations of you ? This is a very touchy subject and many times elders exploit their children. Why not let the children grow up, evolve, mature and be prudent to pick their own life companion ?

On a different note, every romantic endeavor does not require an end. It`s an experience of life and being humans we run into nice, sweet and very nice people while we are out there to lead the journey of life. That`s just natural, I guess.

If every aspect of life had an end clearly cut out then I guess the humans will not appreciate the flow of life and what it has to offer.

Thank you for making me stop by at Chowk and review an article in detail.

urstruly

If it is true, you were a sweat little laceherous kid. Naughty & clever. Then a very sensitve emtional adult. Romantic type but also sensuous, full of desires. And you have undergone or presently undergoing this emotional tumult in you. Only a real experience can bring out such a forceful outburst.

I read it all and it was shockingly realistic.

But the suspended animation during the period of desires is far more sweater than the actual possession. With possession, the passion evaporates rather fast.

Ask the married couples around - the morning after - without mascara, make up, dishevelled hair, unpressed clothes - it is back to actual life.

An enjoyable & a moving read.