Talk to Your Wife

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what did we do to deserve this.

i`m dumbfounded.

was....that....did it......really???? so somebody really wrote this. wow....... i dont really understand poems but i just hated the talk to your wife part all the time. later.

Dear Sriram: You seem to have a message that seemed to also be a promising poem when I read the intro page. However, having read this, I feel: ummmmm.... may be it needs more focus, and definitely a better writing style. Even free verse needs to be lyrical in a way, and this just doesn`t cut it.

Pruning might help. ALso: why not try developing this into a regular article, perhaps? With more focus. (I feel you are talking about too many situations at once.)

Thanks.

very raw and untreated, and no style at all. i like it. but, can i talk to someone else instead?

Good advice and finally a poem one can understand without having to read between the lines.

Reading through this was such a torturous experience! I guess this is our punishment for not submitting enough poems to chowk. Simply awful!

He`s left his socks
all over the floor
and called you up
requesting more

the love may be hard to find
but talk to your husband

You`ve both come in
at seven thirty
the sinked dishes
he describes as ``dirty``
grabbing the remote
not bothering with ``flirty``

side glances. oh yes. the love is hard to find
but talk to your husband.

He yells and pouts and needs to be
fed
His clothes need cleaning,
fresh sheets on the bed,
ohm it away, wave peppermint
around your head

yes god, I`m sure the love is there
and I`ll talk to my husband

You`ve bought him those shirts
so he looks over thirteen
you`ve wisely steered him from velveteen
You`ve even let him use your face cream

uh, god, is goddess around?
the love? why dont YOU talk to my husband?

Where`s Saman and Raka anyway? Lets share the love! :)

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For some odd reason, most wives want their husbands to talk to them - just talk to them:

It could be rubbish, repetitive, mundane, unnecessary or whatever. Maybe it is an exercise to regularly get the innards of the husband`s thinking - to keep on anaylysing & assessing as to what he is upto.

Whereas most husband`s desire minimum superfluous talk from their wives.

Samina:

That`s sweet.

Sriram:

Mocking reality, I guess.

Here I am!
Raka though, I believe is busy in a surgery.
:)

Now, here`s my take:

Its 8:29 AM
I am wide awake
and I`ve just reached office
while he`s still at the orifice
This hardware dude
is now my only muse

I didn`t marry `him` for his intelligence
for it is true that brawn is dumb
his form is no longer comforting
let alone alluring
Hell! these concepts are true, pal!
Just talk to `him`, that`s all

More laters!

thanks for all the feedback

I am not a poet and have no literary pretensions; this came in a stream of consciousness mode and says what it means and means what it says (ixno).. it was not edited at all (first draft) and I left it at that to provide that raw, untreated feel (jang). If it is not upto chowk standards, so be it (farhan, sobia, urstruly).

this will make the most sense to (some subset of) married men. particularly those marriages that have gone into ``silent`` mode and the spouses are mutually dead.

if you read and reflect something maybe something will resonate.. if not, maybe you haven`t yet had the relevant experiences

if you hate it, it probably relates to either your literary values (ahmedm) or life values (or both).

saminasha: I dont know about face cream but I wholeheartedly recommend oil of olay beauty fluid. I got this tip from a fellow grad student years ago who got the tip from his sister.

flyhighkites: yes, there is an article in here but I dont want to give chowk a serious case of indigestion.

and so is saminashas rebuttal