Solace

Your mother and Rabia both were right in the first place. and to conclude the thing with a positive note, would you tell us where the sadqa has gone anyway?-:) We all need such mothers and Rabias in our lives.

overall, good stuff.

Ahsan

(sigh)

Rozaiba: That story reminded me of two things.

One of these two is the sore ears; my parents for some strange reason hated my ears and tried their best to pull them out of my sides throughout mychildhhod, adolescent, and teenage years. They stopped as I started standing on my own feet. or may be I had become the disciplined and prudent son that they always wanted - it is hard to tell. I was a chain smoker as long as dad was giving me the pocket money but I quit smoking as soon as I started working.

The second thing it reminds me of is a story by Ashfaq Ahmad, where he narrates a village life in the pre-Partition days. He describes how the son of village moulvi sahib brought a phonogram from the city, to the village. But to be safe from his father`s anger on this device of devil he played Quranic recitation from an Arabian sheikh in the chopaal; everybody liked it but the next day when a Quranic recitation in a female voice (probably by Umm-e-Kalsum) was played it became hard to find a place even to stand in the chopaal.

Rozaiba:
A good narration. It is such cultural backdrops which lends authenticity and value to such writings. This is the kind of stuff which should become part of english language texts in our schools rather than the alienish and slave-driver garbage being rammed down the throats of the unwitting innocents.

Well written!
..and there is solace in prayer....i`ve always found it...and that is a personal opinion...so dont start bashing me on that point if any of you dont agree.
And rozaiba...dont ponder too much on MBZIXYZblahblahblahs posts...Ive seen enough of them to reach the conclusion that he is an old man whose lost his mind...alzheimer,s or parkinsons i suppose...tsk tsk...he needs solace(prayer would be the correct place since his legs are in the proverbial grave)..:-D
TC..

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I really liked this one Rozaiba.

But....

``She even has a prayer for the Pakistan cricket team!
“Offer this prayer when you go watch the match.” And she recites it to me.``

was right on the money especially tonight with the innings defeat looming.

Someone sure forgot about their prayers....

Indians are about to break out the bubbly....

What the heck! I`ll join them!


Ras

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Whenever i need a good hearty laugh.....i read MBZI....
*roars of laughter*

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it has a very south east asian touch to it, somehow it seems like a conscious effort to insinuate the words which are identifiable to our culture.

Sobia, yes, my middle name is ‘road rage’- stay away from me when I’m driving. Punjabizulu, I liked the ending too : ) temporal, those grammatical errors are annoying. My fault. Faiza, thanks for the help! Dreamz, rakapo$h, and goddess, glad you enjoyed it. Godot, rituals can get very cumbersome. ZahraJ, this was of course a ‘fictional’ tale- but yes have had to give a sadqa for something similar. Humairsha, some people have a gift for being selfless. Ahsanshamim, I agree with you there : ) fara, thanks. actually I should have been mindful of those typos. Heavenly, Muhammed Ali once said, ‘All I need is a prayer!’ : ) badtameez, nothing like aloo ka paratha with orange juice for breakfast! Storyteller, after reading it did you go like ‘aata hai yaad mujh ko guzra hua zamana?’ why did you sigh? Urstruly, well we’re glad your ears are fine and dandy. For some reasons teachers have a fascination with pulling ears. Echoboom, at some level I agree with you. Johnny_bravo, well Ispahani’s posts are always a treat now and then. It’s hard to figure out what’s being said but I’m sure he is trying to say something- one day the truth of it may just hit us! : ) Ras, yeah, should have recited the prayer Rabia had adviced! Darn! I’ll try to remember it for the next test match1 Solace, thanks for the comments.

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R,

I couldn`t help but think of Shahrukh Khan movies when I read the end.
Maybe it is the romanticism. Everything has to go right huh.
But it wasn`t really the story I was reading, it was your style of writing.
How you put the events together and the situations you created in that space.
A well-knit story with a natural flow. Quite enjoyable!

i like the main character in your story.......

I explain to myself that such talk is part of the many compromises I have to make to fit in and I do my best to pretend I agree.
.........my favorite line

well written rozaiba