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#2 Posted by jang on March 30, 2004 10:01:22 am

sucheta

Very cool. For some reason reminded me of the john irvin novel ``The Fourth Hand`` something about the faceless hand and narcotic power of carnal pleasure. A very real urban mumbaiya story, i alomst got car-sick.

#3 Posted by Maharana on March 30, 2004 1:23:50 pm

Sucheta,

Beautiful!!
The boredom and tedium of life for common women and men in india finds temporary relief in bollywood flicks or such close and physiological encounters. Wonder what the village dwellers resort to.
Adios

#4 Posted by MaheshG2 on March 30, 2004 2:37:59 pm

Maybe, such encounters are what give encouragement to anonymous body gropers.

#5 Posted by ixno on March 30, 2004 5:30:48 pm

scandalous : - )
never thought from this point of view

#6 Posted by soundmeister on March 30, 2004 8:11:09 pm

This is great. Please write more Ms. Potnis

#7 Posted by samankhan on March 30, 2004 9:19:35 pm

Why couldn`t the brother just run off as most do?
Why run off with a Muslim girl of all the girls?
Or do I miss something here?

#8 Posted by soundmeister on March 30, 2004 9:50:43 pm

saman#7-
how else would it get published on chowk ;))))

PS>>piece of advice, don`t get hung up on that one detail, enjoy the story

#9 Posted by nazarhayatkhan on March 31, 2004 12:05:46 am

Pontis

Really enjoyable. Tantalizing.

Lonely young wives with husbands across the seas do get vulnerable. I do not blame Padma for those few moments of getting her chemicals worked up through an unseen hand.

This is your field - write more in this area.

#10 Posted by nazarhayatkhan on March 31, 2004 2:36:41 am

Ansari # 1

Chowk is introducing such good new writers with varied subjects. And finally entering the 21st century!

#11 Posted by Saminasha on March 31, 2004 5:24:07 am

Writer,
Edgy, authentic and interesting. I did not expect the last scene at all, and the writer should be commended for taking that leap.

I`d revise or edit the last scene a bit-it seems a bit pervy or written less from Padma`s amazing voice. Give that scene that same imagination and restraint that was given to describing a village as a ``red gash`` or the Aunty.

#12 Posted by PunjabiZulu on March 31, 2004 5:34:31 am

Ansari

I dont think it is fair to describe this as pornography.

It was a good read Sucheta.

Good luck with trying to get published.

#13 Posted by hellbound on March 31, 2004 5:34:31 am

Very Saadat Hasan Mantoish. Reminded me of ``Thanda Ghost``. Very well written and with the subtlety that only a feminine mind can grasp.

Good work

#14 Posted by samankhan on March 31, 2004 5:34:32 am

Soundmeister,
Did enjoy the story but that `one detail` is irritating me no end just as the movies, that put in a taxi driver/sweeper/hapless whatever Muslim character in a sea of other characters by way of charity, do.
Either that or the villains and the goons will be characteristically wearing a bunyan and a lungi, not to mention the beard.
Why can`t the world understand that Muslims can be normal too just like the others.....that they can also be good/bad/moderate just as others and not excusively bad?
I would appreciate complete absence of a Muslim character rather than one creep against 99 other good samaritans.
Don`t you think writers have more responsibility towards depicting an unbiased/true picture rather than projecting caricatures?

#15 Posted by ferozk on March 31, 2004 5:56:50 am

Quite interesting and with very real and empathetic characters.

Ciao