Club X

Rahul:

welcome!

Ashish, the guy with the perma-smirk, was feeling happier with his life than he had right to be. Lately, he had been haunted by the fear of becoming engulfed into The Sea of Mediocrity. He had tried several diversions like paid sex to kinky sex to paid and kinky sex....hehehe...a natural progression of above would be ..erotic love...you know the difference between kinky and erotic is simple the bird or the feather;)

...keep working hard(er)...

rgds,

t

This is so refreshing!
And to think rigor mortis had begun to set in!

Clothes in sexual positions, a blanket ready to commit suicide, a half fallen rug not in a mood to get up...........
Thanks Rahul, for saving us from the usual annui...

And believe me, Nikki four sevens is actually praising your craft here!

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This is pretty funny in a tongue in cheek way...marks for creativity...at least I havent seen this done...

eh...I like the imagery...but the plot kind of reminds me of the teletubbies on drugs. An interesting idea to ponder upon but then it`s just the teletubbies on drugs. If missing some important metaphors or analogies please clue me in. Cuz all I got so far is teletubbies on drugs.

Hi Rahul:

You know your stuff...and the second para encapsulates everything rather well. Also liked the use of Bacon and Egg. But the beginning? You seem to want to let things flow, give the inanimate objects life (transposed against the protagonist`s laziness?), but it comes across as a bit self-conscious. Would love to know more about how clothes can lie in various sexual positions! Were you trying to convey Ashish`s state of mind through them?

Even so...it was a ``Club X`` kind of read, no inflexible rules. (Though you might have watched out for a few punctuations and use of articles.)

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