Monsoon arrives

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Dear All,

Thank you all, what lovely encouraging words.

The piece was done as an exercise in a creative writing class a while ago. We were told to choose one word from a previous exercise at random. I chose the word `laughter`. Then we were told to write a story based on that - right away in the next half hour. Phew!

I liked this one though - maybe because of the sudden thrust - it lacks artifice and extras that one generally inserts....

American #5 and Nadia # 8 - you are right. Maybe these things happen, there wasn`t much thought, sorry! I am not very good at critical abilities. Thanks for pointing them out.

Thanks again all.

Sucheta

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absolutely loved it! you build your stories amazingly well! beautiful!

Nice Suchita .... Lovely ..

What have I felt is that mostly your novelette starts from a thought in your mind , laid on bed and then it starts expanding and wears the environment every times different... and partially virtual captures, and then the story originates like a new born.

thank you sucheta, i`m glad i didn`t sign out after reading that crummy letter to all `sisters`. you are a writer.

I love the theme of fecundity that you have laced through this article. Relating the infertility of nature (lack of rain) with the protagonists own infertility.

I like this quote:

``Slowly, a tiny arm came forward as if to touch me, the red lips parted easily and out came another peal of laughter, bubbling, frothing. ``

Appealing syntax. Short breaky sentences further the idea of an unbearable and erratic heat in the pre monsoon season. Good adjectives as well, not excellent, but definitely good (some parts were better than others). Keep writing!

nice!

How appopriately named...

Monsoon arrived in Lahore 4 hours ago.

Suchetaji, thanks for the lovely piece.

Sucheta Pontis

Delicate, sensitive and very enjoyable . You took us along to that baby and the fresh breeze of the monsoons.

NHK

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