Cold Metal

#7 Posted by temporal on October 6, 2004 6:46:19 am

a/s:

...forgive my indiscretion!...you`re right...

...a belated welcome and as HN hinted hope to see more of your contributions here:)

rgds,

t

#6 Posted by HN on October 6, 2004 12:07:09 am

Anoop,

Very good piece this. The stacatto works. And as Farah pointed out, nice dollops of detail. And your response to t kind of spoils the pleasure for those who might read responses before reading the piece.

Looks like the block has been removed ... on the writing front!

#5 Posted by soundmeister on October 5, 2004 8:42:33 pm

t-bhai

you need to ponder on what is unsaid rather than what is said here. A suggestion- look at it from the point of view of the guilt of the `inadequate` son, not quite a prodigal- and you may begin why the cold, distinctly aloof, detached approach is necessary.

#4 Posted by temporal on October 5, 2004 7:12:18 am

fara:

...excellent technique to use if this were a report or news coverage...cold, analytical, observant...

but

...feels just aloof and cold when the subject is one`s close relative?....hence my query

lve,

t

#3 Posted by fara on October 5, 2004 6:39:31 am

Anoop: i read the entire psssage in almost one go. excellent way of handling such a topic. short sentences. very meaningful. you`ve pointed out details like the watch, gold flake, lunch, nurses, etc. very eloquently.

temporal: i actually like the `cold and distinctly aloof and detached` way he`s used. brings a certain clarity to the descriptions.

#2 Posted by temporal on October 4, 2004 10:51:33 am

Anoop:

..don’t mean to pry but why this cold and distinctly aloof and detached write up?

rgds,

t

#1 Posted by harimau on October 3, 2004 11:26:03 pm

[....handpainted sign ``Operation Theatar`` in your average Hindi flick...]

How about ``Operation Theatore`` at the All-India Institute of Medical Sciences in New Delhi? (I saw it in a TV program.)