One More Day Before Debu’s Death

Nice story....depictive, to say the least.....though not spared by faux pas...
#1.Shani is referred to as a Goddess...who is very much a male God....
#2.The bus goomti time-keeper may be inside a coop, and not a coup....( i feel so)...similarly, for the train cubicle.....

but for these, a poignant screen-shot of life and times in erstwhile Kolkata....

cheers,
Sumit.

Each character is brought to life with excellent writing and deep emotions. Keeps the reader engaged.

Dear Jang, Hamidm2 and Feedback:

I like to thank you all for liking the story. I promise to post more as I write more ...

Dear FarzanaVersey:

I was so glad to read that the story made you `see` things - especialy some scenes from your favorite Bengali films, scenes that made me feel nostalgic too.

Dear M.B.Z.Isphahani:

I see that the story brought back strong memories for you - I am glad that you liked reading my story.

cheers,

Gautam

Basu,
This was touching without being sentimentalized. I hope more is to come from you. Deep fiction is rare on chowk and is not a lot appreciated.

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``Recently Phuli was very busy with her work; she usually left the house early when Debu would be still sleeping and when he returned, Phuli was exhausted from cooking at other`s houses. Debu would be exhausted too from his dhanda.``

i can almost feel the opressive humidity, heat and sheer fatigue before during and after the act.

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beautiful !............... savored every line

I truly liked this a great deal...even while reading it images came alive from some old Bengali films, for some reason of Soumitro Chatterji sitting on a reclining chair and Madhabi Mukherji wiping her face with the end of her saree pallu...of Writer`s Building, the Coffee House, Malik mansion, and the station...I know there is no connection, but a good story is one which makes you `see` things...

reminded me of the movie Yuva.