Two Poems

#20 Posted by atif2 on November 3, 2004 7:48:02 am

noetherf - actually, beauty lies in the eyes of the beheld. think about it.

#19 Posted by noetherf on November 3, 2004 5:46:25 am

Jawahara & Mrinal: Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, thank you for liking :)

#18 Roopa: Thanks!

#18 Posted by Roopa on November 1, 2004 9:49:55 pm

Good one!!

#17 Posted by Mrinal on November 1, 2004 9:49:54 pm

Thats a beautiful piece. `Wandering Star` is too good!!!

#16 Posted by Garam_Chai on November 1, 2004 7:05:49 pm

#14 Huma_Mir
First of all, i am wondering if you are the T.V. actress Huma Mir. Secondly, i would not be surprised if you are my 2nd cousin Huma Mir. She lives in lahore. But at the end, i may be little disappointed that you are not my cousin. That way, i could share the feeling, what you felt after finding no connection with Fakhra. Aap kahan rehti hein, aur chowk par kia karti rehti hein!!!

Regards.

#15 Posted by jawahara on November 1, 2004 5:11:39 am

Beautiful! That`s all I can say.

#14 Posted by huma_mir on October 31, 2004 7:14:17 pm

garam chai # 13 - there has been only one of my friends whose name was Fakhra. That was when i was going to elementary school. i remember, even in that age, she had a knack for writing poetry. So I was just wondering if it was the same Fakhra, since the author`s profile mentions that she is from the same area.

And no I am not disappointed. It happens :)

#13 Posted by Garam_Chai on October 31, 2004 6:21:47 pm

#12 neotherf (Fakhra)
After reading your profile, i feel like that i am reading my own profile. It seems that me and HUMA_MIR are trying to establish a personal contact with you, who write so beautifuly.
Composing ideas into poems or essays is an art. It is like a rain. Rain drops fall on different spots, and each carry a diffrent experience. These drops become streamlines while adding the muddy color of soil. Then these muddy streams fall into river, and forming a new homogenous river water. Multiple entities tranforming into single entity.
That be so nice to exchanging ideas, and talking about beauty with you in islamabad.
What you say?

#9 Huma_mir
is it disappointing that neotherf is not the same the one u know from pindi?

Regards.

#12 Posted by noetherf on October 31, 2004 5:43:20 am

huma_mir:

Answer to #9: No.

Thank you for liking Wandering Star, I must admit the title, was inspired by Portishead.

Sorry for the delayed response, these days are just, cuckoo.

Best

#11 Posted by huma_mir on October 30, 2004 3:51:23 pm

noetherf # 10 - you are welcome for # 8 :)

best regards

#10 Posted by noetherf on October 29, 2004 9:26:54 pm

#7 temporal,

You are right. Creativity arises only when you lose the fear of being wrong. Hmm. It could`ve been the science syndrome (errors and apologies), thanks for the note :)

#8, #9 huma_mir: Thank you very much.

#9 Posted by huma_mir on October 29, 2004 12:41:42 pm

fakhra - just out of curiosity, did you or your family ever lived in Pindi - near viqar un-nisa girls college?

#8 Posted by huma_mir on October 29, 2004 12:09:48 pm

fakhra - i absolutely loved the ``wandering star``. It was sooo moving, and at some level i felt i could relate to it. Thank you for sharing it.

I see triumph lie at my feet
As humanity questions my existence
I have learnt to make ends meet
I savor my bitter independence

A new beginning is near
That will lead me to my destiny,
Destiny;
Should I hope for or fear?
Closer to the end of my tyranny?

beautiful!

#7 Posted by temporal on October 29, 2004 11:25:35 am

fakhra/noetherf:

I realized later best and worst are too subjective, I apologize for the error.

no need to apologize:)

there are writers and poets who relish revising a piece once they have made a final decision...the moving finger writes and having writ ...and then their are others (including me) who almost always find something to tweak and change in their seen or unseen work...always trying to find that perfect word or phrase to fit in the slot...guess to each kind their own...

lve,

t

#6 Posted by noetherf on October 29, 2004 6:24:01 am

#3 sameerJB, #4 garam_chai

Thank you very much for liking them.

#5 Posted by noetherf on October 29, 2004 6:24:01 am

The third stanza should read:

About loving,
the highs and the lows,
for love knows nothing but
the averages.
Be an average.

Not `the best and the worst`. I realized later best and worst are too subjective, I apologize for the error.

There`s an attempt at highlighting motivation in these poems, for which, I feel Faiz deserves the credit. Thank you Chowk for the long waiting period :) It was worth it.

#4 Posted by Garam_Chai on October 28, 2004 9:00:59 pm

Fakhra
I could really relate to your poems. Fitting two words hope and fear in the same line is beautiful. I see that style in Ghalib`s ghazals. For exapme,

Huey hein payoon hie zakhmi nabard-e-ishq mein
na thehra jaey hai, na bhaga jaey hai muj sey

aashqi sabr talab aur tamana baitab
dil kia karoon khun-e-jigar honey tak

I be visiting islamabad in december to see my sister over there. It be nice to meet a talented writer like you.

Regards.

#3 Posted by noetherf on October 28, 2004 2:07:33 pm

Well then, take your pick.

#2 Posted by SameerJB on October 28, 2004 2:07:33 pm

..absolutely superb poems...I found beauty in simplicity than complexity of expression......no show off, no concealment of emotions and thoughts....laying them out as they are......as they should be....in this era of face lift, make up, beautifying and fine tuning, heart sometime aches for simplicity, originality and freshness.....

.....not only the poems are excellent but the use of question marks on uncertainty added extra flavor to it...particularly in

About fear,
Of the Lord or His people?

and

About dying.
Our times are decided?

Keep it up!

#1 Posted by jamalrana on October 28, 2004 1:21:32 pm

``About choices. There are good ones and bad ones, and ones that make us happy.``

And I thought its always the bad ones that make us happy.