Seventy Days in Karachi

Re: # 18

Did I say 84/4? I WISH :/ It`s 64/4!

Re: # 15 ``Not a single place with a gleaming, shining, American-style Dunkin Donut...`` - when I went to Karachi May 1999, a DD had just opened in Defense. The first few days it was by invitation only :-) - & I wasn`t invited... I don`t know if it`s still around..

Re: # 16
annieqb. P:when I went to Karachi May 1999, a DD had just opened in Defense. The first few days it was by invitation only :-) - & I wasn`t invited... I don`t know if it`s still around..``}

annie,
Thanks for restoring my faith in Karachi. Apparently my invitation got lost in the mail. At least, Karachi is as much a modern city as Lahore. Now only if we had a Hira Mandi. :)

Very Good Miss Iqbal. Do keep writing, although do make it a habit to proof read your creations atleast twice to get rid of grammatical errors, comma splices and dissonant sentences. Tell us more about your time in Karachi. What else did you do besides breathing the humid air. Did you converse with strangers. Did you visit any places of historical interest while in Pakistan. Offer your opinions on the state of affairs in Karachi. Any other fun activities you indulged in besides shopping and attending weddings.

Sameena,
Oh how could you? Don`t tell me that you are named Sameena, like That Woman on UP.
Ignoring that aspect of your narrative, I enjoyed reading this anecdote. You did not mention whether Karachi has a Dunkin Donut. Right now that piece of information is crucial to determining its place in the totem pole of cities.

Why the hell bother writing? And now that you have why bother apologizing?

good for you sameena!!

Sorry to screw up with the geography (the exact latitude and longitude lines), but I wrote this piece for a writing class full of white people. Karachi is very close to the equator when you think about it from North American perspective.

I`m sorry you found the ending dissapointing, this piece wasn`t fictional at all. It was just placing a fond memory on paper. My main goal for this paper was to view my experience there through a thermometer.

BTW...I still got an A for this paper despite the spelling and grammar some nitpickers may have found :)

besides the few mistakes that she has made in the article i think, overall, she has done a good job.

ignore them, though constructive criticism is always good.

anyhow, as for her feeling towards karachi i could express the same about that of lahore, i.e the feeling of belonging, family, the language and other connotations that i asscoicate lahore to be in my view.

``and a D+ in spelling and grammar ;)`` - Americans are taught to break English rules so we should approach this piece the US way!

``I`m sure she meant Karachi is closer to the equator compared to the city/town (New York?)in the US where she came from.`` - Exactly!

She`s given an articulate description about Karachi`s air. Most of the article revolves around it too.

The minute you step out of the airport, the humidity pricks your body until you`re soaked and it doesn`t matter how long you stay there; as long as it`s hot, you`ll have to suffer. Besides, we all know that even God has given up on KESC.

Regardless of the equator issue, I think that the author has given a lucid account of Karachi’s ambiance. However, in my opinion, that is of course if I have misinterpreted, and so correct me if I’m wrong, but I do feel the point of your story has been submerged in description. You successfully managed to build a beautiful climax but this was overshadowed with the disappointing ending.

Peace

#5 by Nadia_Zehra

[But I think the writer wanted to say that as compared to other cities of Pakistan, Karachi is the closest.]

I`m sure she meant Karachi is closer to the equator compared to the city/town (New York?)in the US where she came from.

[Karachi is located geographically very close to the equator.]

Karachi or even Pakistan/India doesn`t pass through equator to be closest. But I think the writer wanted to say that as compared to other cities of Pakistan, Karachi is the closest.

Geographically Pakistan is 30º00´ North of the Equator.Karachi coordinates 24° 48` N 66° 59`E .

Logically the statement is true, whereby there are other places of Lower Sindh like Thata and Badin which can be persumed the most closest places of Pakistan from equator.

The article is very well written explaining the temperature/ humidity and the thoughts which arise in such circumstances which become part of beautiful memories.

and a D+ in spelling and grammar ;)

[Karachi is located geographically very close to the equator.]

... you get F in geography...unless a thousand miles is considered very close...;)

abay ye to apni americanfob hai... now do i have to read this?