Blood and Virtue

am:

:)

vicarious badla?

sublimation?

good short-short!

now that we`re cutting down on the excess...er...mean verbiage...a poem next?

lve

t

damn i luv short stories

good job amro

I read this twice. Will someone please explain this story to me.

He butchered an animal while thinking about the nagging of his family members. And the Moral of the story is??????

you da man! i mean you are in touch with your masculanity ( albeit sensitively) ..

this is how men are..an intense emotion and nonchalance after the release.

and dont listen to temporal.

This was good...and like others pointed out...tersely delivered made the medium the message!

Just an idea...remember Maqbool!

Good stuff, Amrita!

call it a butcher`s catharsis?

p.s. don`t forget to post an elucidated version along with a moral on UP :P

regards

create a frame - a visual;
make up histories of the people you see in that visual;
over-state every little/big thing in the scene shamelessly;
since, impulse to write is raw and shortlived - makeup a melodramatic connection within the visual;
some wordplay is preferred route and thats it - a real short..short-story (watever that is) is ready for consumption.

so he killed all the women?? sorry amrita : )

First of all, a big thank you to all those who read this short short and a bigger one to those of you who posted.

t - verbiage?? did you say verbiage?? I heard you!!! woe is me....

scoutie - thank you! I love em too... short stories in general, I mean :)

Kaura - you read this twice? You`re kidding me! Mummy kasam? As for the moral - its a secret.

Jang - Thank you! And everyone who ever heard my efforts at poetry also hopes that I dont listen to temporal. :)

Harish - thanks! But ... remember Maqbool? [duh-duh] ???

Sho - :)). Thanks and :P indeed.

RD - not quite ``shamelessly`` but more ``un-affectedly``. Subtle difference that comes when the impulse to write is, alas, not shortlived. But on other points, you`re on to something.

Ixie - hey, thanks for showing up! Thats the question isnt it? :)

``dont paint war scenes,dont show blood splashed on the canvass--it disturbs peace of mind...always paint which is soothing to the eyes and mind od the viewer``
This is what the great painter Sobha Singh used to say.Same applies to writing.
You are a good writer,definitely much better than many chowk writers....dont waste your telent on such abstract things.

``My father is in the flesh trade`` he said.
``He is!`` was the shocked reply.
``Yes `xxxx` butchers, we own that you know``.

amrita...u a NSU/GF grad? i was there as well which is why im wondering...i did film.
i thought u were.

great visuals. detailed comments later....ive been reading ur stuff in bits n pieces (sorry been away from chowk and also travelling now) and this is a change from the other stuff.

is there an email i can reach u at?

z.rizvi

Doc - thanks for the compliment but I like to experiment a little especially with shorter fiction. Otherwise, I keep hearing the same voices over and over again and ... I get bored. :) Its a good thought, however.

Subs - :)). Did a dying Russian sheikh tell you that one while he was waiting for your account details?

Zehra - check your email :). Yup, this is about the only one of mine that you can read quick I guess.

I liked the story. Twist in the tail short stories should always be short, even abrupt, like ``Appointment in Samaara`` (the Jeffrey Archer version).

Dear Amrita

You are gifted !! Reading your story made me reminiscent of the obscurantist slant of writing often evidenced in Dostoyevsky. This was like reading an abridged version of Crime and Punishment and/or Karamazov Brothers.

This piece is your venom unleashed on the chattering classes, the patriarchal societal structure and the abyss of post-modernity we live in.

damn one of these days when i grow-up, i will take a writing class.. maybe even the iowa one..