Fauzia’s Rejection

Nadia Zehra,

Please dont be swayed by the flattery of old men obsessed with sex. Your piece is good, but it needs a lot of revising, more focus, and a great deal of editing. Yes, its very nice that you write both in Urdu and English, but what you were trying to convey was lost in the murkiness of your prose.

With the proper revision, your piece will make it to front page.

-S

I feel that I have been conned into reading this article by the author. The summary on the front page was too alluring. The actual content was disappointing. I feel cheated. Violated, if you will. But since I`ve already read it, I might as well say a few things.

While Fauzia has been sufficiently applauded / condemned for her stance, my thoughts go deeper than that. I am worried about her younger brother Fauzan. He too is the inheritor of ``dark chocolate areolas``. As for his ``dark triangle``, well, thanks to the abundance of hindoo genes in the family, nothing much protrudes out of it either - at least nothing significant enough for him to write home about.

His sister was able to flaunt her goods in the west and successfully allure John - a connoisseur of chocolaty areolas. The last sentence of this story gives the full details of why John fell for Fauzia - ``[he] loved her for who she was: a dark, sexy, princess of the East.`` Notice, no mention of her education or her brains. In that, John was no different than any man, or at least no better than the boys back home (the anti-heroes of this story) whose only crime was that they preferred pinkish areolas.

Back to why I am worried about Fauzan. He too is headed for west. But he cannot hope to allure girls by merely flaunting his goods - like his sister did. If a Joan really wanted to marry a dark man based on his goods, she would rather go with a black man - with something significant enough protruding from his ``dark triangle`` for HER to write home about.

For Fauzan now, there is only one way - the hard way. He HAS to work hard, excel in school and perhaps save enough to keep a sports car.

In my books, its Fauzan who comes out as the true tragedy of this story.

interesting piece, but ``and a black triangle of hidden mystery``?? That made me clench my buttocks just a teensy bit - too cliched in a Mills & Boon-ish coy soft-porn kind of way.

Atif,

Perhaps you should revisit your own narrow interpretation of ``sexy``.....sexy to me is a balance of intellect, soulfulness, strength and attractiveness....

atif2:82
You`re good .
It is called tit-for-tattaa.


Aao Aao chalo gitmo chalaiN

vahaaN eik dominatrix unobsessed by sex
untouched by manly hands,
has never had her `regulars`
now wants it on cammand
still a virgin , unexplored
is waiting to whiplash all men
who always like to see hymen
intact before expiry date
they might be old,
but never late.

toa Aao Aao chalaiN
zaraa gitmo chalaiN

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Open in another window, to listen and read lyrics at the same time.

Ek chatur naar

ek chatur nAr kar ke si.ngAr
mere man ke dvAr ye ghusat jaat
ham marat jaat, are he he he
yak chatur nAr kar ke si.ngAr threedots

pa re sa, sa sa sa ni dh sa
sa re sa dha dha pa
pa dha sa re sa
sa re ga dha pa

yak chatur nar kar ke si.ngaa threedots r

ki: ##ummm ## dham
mah: ayyo !
ki: are dham, o dham, o dham dham dham ruk
##umm ## bru - 2
o a aa i ii u U e ai o au a.n a: ##(vowels)##
um nAm nAm nAm nAm nAm nAm
nAm nAm lama lama lama lama la
um bal bal bal bal re,
bal bal bal bal re, bal bal bal bal re
om

ek chatur nAr ba.DI hoshiyAr - 2
apane hI jaal me.n phasat jaat
ham hasat jaat are ho ho ho ho ho !
ek chatur nAr ba.DI hoshiyar

su: tuu kyo.n threedots
mah: chhI re

kare lAkh lAkh duniyA chaturAI
chhuTTI kar dU.ngA mai.n usakI
abake jo AvAz lagAI
chhuTTI kar dU.ngA, aa aa aa threedots
tA jum, taka jum, taka num, yaka jum
tak tankidia threedots

ki: pa.Dh ke botan chIr bi chakkar - 2 (?)
har bud khudi -budi khud kar - 2
chhiTake to rere mon mAkhan - 2
sab chale gaye, sab chale gaye chidamudh chiting chitubud
chitubud gaay, chitubud gaay, chitubud haay haay haay

jA re, jaa re kAre kAgA
kA kA kA kyo.n shor machaaye
us nArI kA dAs nA ban jo
rAh chalat ko rAh bulAe

kaalaa re jaa re jaa re
are nAle me.n jaake tuu mu.Nh dhoke aa
Kaalaa re ga re ga re

mah: ye ga.Daba.D jI
ki: o gA re gA re
mah: ye sur badalA
ki: o gA re gA re
mah: ye hamako maTakA bolA
ki : o gA re gA re
mah: ye sur kidhar hai jI, ye sur threedots; ye threedots, ennAyA idhu ##(Tamil)##
yek chatur naar threedots
am chho.DegA nahii.n jI
yek chatur naar threedots
am paka.Dake rakhegA jI

ye ghusat jaat
ham marat jaat are aa aa aa

tuu kyA jAne kyA hai nArI
jis tan laage more nainA
usape sArI duniyA vArI

mah: nAch nA jaane, A.ngan te.DhA
Teee.DhA, Te.DhA Te.DhA Te.DhA Te.DhA - 4
naach nA jaane, aa.ngan Te.DhA
Te.DhA Te.DhA Te.DhA Te.DhA - 4
us sa.ng lAge more nainA
abake jo AvAz lagAI

ki: o Te.Dhe!
mah: oy
ki: o ke.De!
mah: o yA
ki: are sIdhe ho jaa re
sIdhe ho jaa re
sIdhe ho jaa
vAh rI cha.ndaniyA, vAh re chakore
rAm banAI ye kaisii jo.DI
kare nachAyA tA tA thaiyyA
tAl pe naache la.nga.DI gho.DI
are dekhI
are dekhI terI chaturAI
mah: ye phir ga.Daba.D
ki: are dekhI terI chaturaaI
mah: phir bhaTakAyA
ki: tujhe suro.n kI samajh nahii.n aaI
tUne korI ghAs hI khAI
are gho.De!
mah: ye gho.DA bolA
ki: o nigo.De!
mah: ye gaalI diyA
ki: are dekhI terI chaturAI
mah: yek chatur naar threedots
ki: gho.De dekhI terI chaturAI
mah: yek chatur naar threedots
ki: gho.De dekhI terI chaturAI
mah: yek chatur naar threedots
ki: ek chatur naar threedots
ki: ek chatur naar threedots
mah: ayyo gho.De terI threedots
ki: are gho.De terI threedots
mah: kyA re ye gho.DA -chatur, gho.DA -chatur bolA,
yek pe rahanA yA gho.DA bolo yA chatur bolo threedots gaao
ki: ek chatur naar ba.DI hoshiyaar
apane hI jaal me.n phasat jaat
ek chatur naar! ##(Tune becomes faster here) ##
ba.DI hoshiyArI!
ye ghusat jaat
mah: ham marat jaat, marat jaat ##(Mahmood gets stuck) ##
ye aTak gayaa !!!

Acha...diaper shab has started ba-ba-baping....is he rocking himself back and forth in anxiety, I wonder?

Re: # 82 Agreed!

However, a few important points that you skipped through, add to the poor chap`s dilemma..
-Even though he might possess as good ASSETS as his sister did, even the western society won`t let Fauzan publicly exhibit them, thus further deminishing his chances to attract Joan`s attention.
-Being sponsored by his family for higher education, he would be constantly kept under vigil and asked for a payback by the family, unlike Fauzia who ws just left unchecked by her family, thus resulting in futher stress and disgust for the kid.
-The boy can`t even vent his agony after returning home attaining all that higher education and getting brains by rejecting the girls approaching him for the rishta...coz no girls look for the brains, and he still happens to maintain the same looks!
so yes, Fauzan is the truly taumatized soul!
sigh

Women have never been able to exert control over anything relating to their daily existence. There is an imbalance of power between the males and the females leading to further exploitation and domination. It is sad that a woman cannot even decide in matters pertaining to her fertility then how dare we even think she is going to get rights to emotional, psychological, social, financial and sexual freedom.
In our society we believe the saying “Women are their own worst enemy” which rings true because men hold all the power and women compete for the power. Women gain their power and status from men and then use that power in the private domain of their homes. “ Women`s power is exercised through their influence on men, so therefore, women must become rivals and compete with each other for power” Thus the oppressed become the oppressors.

Re: # 8
Miss Sha,

That is absolutely right!! female empowerment!!!!!

............ i find the whole concept of going out to ``look`` at girls rather demeaning ..........

.........but things are changing for the better ............ now if we can only keep the dark forces of retrogression at bay, our daughters will not have to suffer fauzia`s humiliation ..............

Re: # 85
That was superb.PaRosan is one of my all time favourite movies.You can see Mehmood at his best.

Does the story mean that :

1. Traditional Pakistani women are too much dependent. If by chance, some of them become independent, they start considering themselves someone out of the world. Dark, short, egoistic Pakistani men are unfit for them. Their standards ``goes up`` to Gara Chitta Johns and Jims.

2. Almost every Paki lady, since her childhood dreams of being a ``princess`` who lives in the palace of her prince. In real life, her ``prince`` works in some office for a dozen of hours a day. How bad is it for the princess who feel bored during this time of watching cable channels. Muft Khori Pakistani Khvateen. Then they demand of equality of rights. Purpose of life for Pakistani women is to find a suitable ``baqra`` named ``prince`` who can take care of them for whole of his life. Fauzia was an exception because she didn`t get this oppurtunity.

Well done writer. You didn`t summarizes the story and let the readers extract their own lessons..

but this is what the smart, intelligent, beautiful and the bright ones have to say.

Nadia_Zehra wrote an excerpt from her great story ( #69).
Nadia_Zehra

Here is another one.
Succubus: ilog On Fauzia`s na Simply brilliant.

charlie:92

You might have a point. Very astute, I must admit.

The sad part is that amidst the cacophony & stampede to write instant `literature` a lot of ``progressives`` resort to these suicide-bombing equivalents of becoming `authors` overnight.

I read this piece out of curiosity and found it to be completely devoid of any literary merit whatsoever...it’s nothing but grumbling of a sexually starved renegade fit for a chat among the bimbos.

miriam #53:

How predictable and sad that a woman (in this case Fauzia) claims her identity (thereby her sexuality) and on cue enter modesty proselytizing mullahs and their smitten acolytes.

as a writer bismil has pushed just the right buttons...the question i asked myself when i read this was...would i have written it differently?...probably...i`d have gone easy on masturbation and safe sex...after all don`t we know good muslims do not masturbate?...specially the madresah crowd...what with their young wards...no we will not mention pederasty...will not write about it...will not discuss it...and will not mention chickens and goats...no, no, no...the pristine pakistani muslim male does not masturbate...and please.....will not mention safe sex!

...it ( this masturbation and safe sex) detracts from the serious issue of marriage in our regressive country where after all the lip service to islam by the mullahs and non mullahs woman is still a chattel...a bartering object...everything but an insaan...

...as parents know good rishtas are hard to come by...compounded by unreasonable expectations ( i`ll not elaborate)

…we are a repressed culture, which insists on categorizing a woman as either a virgin, or whore. And the rest of us who don’t conform to one of the two prescribed labels are to be relegated to the hinterland where we won’t cause too much of a ruckus!

not on chowk!

dichotomy is alive and well the world over... in particular with the crowd that yearns to push the baby back in the womb...try hard as they do...every single attempt by them fails...
...education and empowerment is the salvation for everyone...including women...and education and empowerement is the weapon that forces of regression can never succeed in putting back in their pandora`s box...

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