The Inheritor

Some phrases are intense, poignant and manage to leave an impact. Starts on a heavy note, but tends to lose the grip towards the end. Nevertheless, a good read. Do look forward to read more from you, albeit there`s room for improvement.

ps. Please do not forget to give it a proof-reading before you submit next time.

regards

Ramesh, this was a lovely read.Reminded me of The Outsider by Camus. Would await more from you.And Subroto,I think this story is complete in itself.

Re: # 6

I`m just curious...is this Bidisha Majumdar?

Re: # 7 testing.

(I am sure the article is good too).

Some parts are quite good except that the ending is a bit abrupt (especially when you have crafted it well and built the atmosphere slowly). Is this chapter 1 of a novel that you are writing?

the dark humour and scorn are too on the face. the description sometimes overshadows the storyline, and perhaps, reflects a confusion of thought.continuity needs to be checked.nonetheless, likeable.

Re: # 2Yes. It’s really depressing. At least, I could evoke that in you! As you said, a bollywood masala is far better. I agree. Best.

Re: # 3

thanks for the comments.

Liked your wry humour. Good read. Needs a grammar/spell check though.

This is so depressing.This guy must be a manic depressive.Thank God for Bollywood.

Your score: Poor, 3 out 10..... also, ever heard of a spell check software?