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A Moment of Silence

Ozer Khalid June 30, 2005

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#42 Posted by stuka on July 2, 2005 8:11:28 am
``Muslim detainees suffered physical and verbal abuse from despotic guards under the cruelest conditions of solitary confinement and the wearing of shackles during non-contact visits. ``

Terrorist suspects in GITMO enjoy comfort and dignity compared to political prisoners in Muslim countries like Saudi, Iran, Syria etc. Heck, there would be no need for a rendition policy (sending them to Egypt) if we could torture these bastards here in the states.

``In Afghanistan hundreds of innocent Muslims were massacred in Qala-i-Jhangi. Despite international humanitarian law yelling for a moratorium on the use of cluster-weapons. Both Uncle Sam and Her Majesty`s government denied Amnesty International’s request for an investigation into the incidents at Qala-i-Jhangi fort. ``

Are you going to write a poem on ``innocent Nazis`` killed in the firebombing of Dresden? The ``innocent Muslims`` of Qala e Jhangi were all Taliban and they had killed a CIA officer. They were killed after they refused to surrender.

``Here where I live in the UK, the “Blairite” government passed scantily clad ‘emergency’ legislation which provided for detention of foreign nationals without charge or trial, thereby tailoring a nebulous shadow criminal justice system. ``

Keeping in mind the number of British Muslims arrested/killed in Kashmir, Afghanistan, Iraq etc as well as the arrest of Islamic terrorists in the UK itself makes the need for such legislation mandatory.

The Patriot Act has not affected a single American citizen and the US is under no obligation to give the same degree of protection to non Citizens.

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#38 Posted by KaalChakra on July 2, 2005 4:14:27 am
Dear Ozer Khalid

If you had hidden anything deep in this poem, you hid it too deep for this reader. Please also write something for us prosaic unpoets and not-so-profound thinkers.



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#40 Posted by OzerKhalid on July 2, 2005 4:17:59 am


Kulsum Beig you accuse this author of political myopia yet how can you disregard the glaring chariots of fire stoked by Uncle Sam and its cohorts who are refueling the flames of racism?

The US Patriot Act is merely one case in point. Political quiescence may portend to the norm for you Kulsum and human rights a romantic idealism to your ilk, yet it is your demagoguery of the status quo that impels an uphill battle bringing all moral consciousness into dishonorable disrepute.

Public information on illegal detention post 9/11 remains scant. It is brazenly clear that many POW`s were forcibly held incommunicado. Muslim detainees suffered physical and verbal abuse from despotic guards under the cruelest conditions of solitary confinement and the wearing of shackles during non-contact visits.

In Afghanistan hundreds of innocent Muslims were massacred in Qala-i-Jhangi. Despite international humanitarian law yelling for a moratorium on the use of cluster-weapons. Both Uncle Sam and Her Majesty`s government denied Amnesty International’s request for an investigation into the incidents at Qala-i-Jhangi fort.

A number of banana republics sold all their oranges short and jumped onto the ‘anti-terrorist’ bandwagon to stifle political dissent. Since it is de rigueur. Legally definitions of ‘terrorism’ are hazardously vague. The terrorist attacks fuelled a climate of hysteria garnering a useful cloak behind which to make inroads to curb the ambillical chord of democratic rights and civil liberties.

Here where I live in the UK, the “Blairite” government passed scantily clad ‘emergency’ legislation which provided for detention of foreign nationals without charge or trial, thereby tailoring a nebulous shadow criminal justice system.

The Anti-terrorism, Crime and Security Act 2001 cataclysmically contravenes Article 5(t) of the European Convention on Human Rights and Article 9 of the ICCPR [International Covenant on Civil and Political Rights] in order to allow for indefinite detention. Under the Act, the Secretary of State may order such detention, without charge or trial and without recourse to judicial review.

Kulsum what this poem attempts to portray is the hypocrisy and selectivity of governments and their handmaiden: the media. For example why do those who condemn human rights violations in Iraq negligently not protest against human rights violations by Russian troops in Chechnya, or by the authorities in Uzbekistan against Muslims who peacefully practice their faith outside the state apparatus?
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#36 Posted by drlokraj on July 2, 2005 4:06:31 am
Dear Ozer,

I read this poem again and again... and some interacts,specially of BeeJay(as he mentioned my name in few of them)in an effort to understand why it offended some of the readers.Even on UP,some people mentioned that they find it hard to understand what you wanted to convey.

First about the content.You have touched a very pertinent topic...one of the major problem which the humanity is facing today.Its very courageous of you to speak about it in the present times when we all in general try to just be in our own shells and pretend not to see anything.To my mind,the problem people are having is to ignore the symbolism and see it in more concrete way.I dont blame them entirely for that because this happens when in a poem we mention specific events,facts and particular people.It becomes difficult to differentiate between the news paper type reports and subtlities of poetry.

Secondly,about the technical aspects of poem.Some verses are too long to be accommodated in poem and preserve the symbolic aspect.It blurrs the underlying message which is in the later part of the poem.Till reaching there,the reader becomes opinionated and ignore the wider message.

Some appear to be more interested in the poet rather than the poem.This may be because of fist and second aspects which I mentioned above or may be because of their personal curiosity to know more about you.

To be fair to BeeJay,nothing escapes his microscopic scrutiny.I agree with his observation that this ppoem does not appear to be coming stright out of heart.It seems,you have worked consciously on it,but I am sure the critism will be taken constructively and will help to improve your poetic skills.
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#39 Posted by OzerKhalid on July 2, 2005 4:15:26 am
Re: # 36

Dear Dr Lokraj

Your noteworthy points are well-received. Especially when you pin-point that ``Some appear to be more interested in the poet rather than the poem.``

The interest, if any, should only be geared towards the ``poem``. Its ``content``. And nothing else.
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#33 Posted by BeeJay on July 2, 2005 3:13:20 am

#31 Ozer

Dear Ozer,

Because of some little-understood reasons, my interactions appear to make many people mad, so there is a chance that this could make other interactors madder still. However, in fairness, and since others have chosen to do it, I must also make a good-faith attempt to provide my comments on your work itself, instead of what you call ``wisecracks``.

1. In spite of your evident and considerable shortcomings in the two areas of looks and talents (both of which are supposedly highly valued commodities in the movie industry), I must give you credit for your quality of persistence. It will be unfair to demonize somebody who can keep trying again and again and not yield an inch, no matter how utterly idiotic that person looks (believe me, I know what I am talking about). You appear to make an attempt to at least answer some of the questions that are thrown your way. The fact that you have dared to address mine from earlier indicates that you are VERY courageous!

2. Not being a literary person, my main complaint with your work is as follows – there appears to be a lack of conviction in your words. My janitorial skills tell me that these words are not quite genuine. The lines of the poem are long (too long), the subject matter too diffused, and every one of your words appears to have been contrived to meet some particular objective. Real poetry (at least the way this janitor sees it) must flow from the heart – yours does not – in fact it appears to owe its origin to the source which our friend Cayenne often (alas, too often) using his own brand of humor, refers to as “where the sun don’t shine”.

3. In my view, use of multiple nicks to conduct conversations with yourself is a patently fraudulent act (mind it, I have no problem with individuals having several nicks for different occasions), a practice you clearly engage in. It shows utter disrespect for the average intelligence level of your intended audience. The fact is that not only you have done so in the past (and never denied it), you continue to engage in this fraudulent act here too. This indicates that you have a very low opinion of your intended target audiences. This also indicates that you are incapable of changing your “spots”.

4. There is also an utter disregard for the feelings and sensitivity of others. For example, your interactor’s page, while revealing a very limited part of you (mostly superficial details) uncovers parts of other people whose concerns regarding such exposures were never taken into consideration by you. This reveals you as a selfish individual who is so consumed by his own needs of the hour that he is incapable of thinking of others.

5. There also appears to be an element of cowardice in this work. You put up a long disclaimer-type introduction up front, as if you anticipate the adverse reaction and are trying your hardest to pre-empt it. If this piece of work were genuine in nature, you would say what came to your heart and not be wishy-washy about it! Your selective responses indicate a similar pattern – you chose to answer some questions but not others. For example, in #31, you chose to respond to the part of my comment regarding Saddam (although you completely ignored the part about “where were you?”) you skipped the part about Kashmir – which would have been a more contentious topic for this crowd.

Since I need to return to my janitorial duties at this point, let me cut this short as follows.

In summary, the beauty of any poem – even this “poem”, must and can only be judged by the proverbial eye of the beholder. As I pointed out in an earlier interact – to find a measure of beauty in this poem, one must have to be really blind, and I’ve a feeling that others may agree with that assessment.

Having said all that, it’s important to add that (even if some of the words the janitor uses are tough) I always wish everyone well, including (and perhaps especially) yourself.

Sincerely,
BeeJay.

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#35 Posted by OzerKhalid on July 2, 2005 3:47:52 am
Re: # 33

Dear Beejay,

Finally you have dispensed your opinion, in your own unique style, on the ``subject matter`` of the poem. Fair enough it is not your cup of ``chai`` and I respect that. Anyways I would still seek to ask you the question to a previous comment:

`` And where were you, O great, great knight
When Saddam’s thumb crushed rank and file``

Beejay by making the above comment are you legitimising the attrocities that are ravaging Iraqi civilians under US soldiers post-Saddam ? Seems so to me....and are you saying that what happened in Abu Ghraib is any better than Saddam`s regime ?

RSVP. Thanks.
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#37 Posted by OzerKhalid on July 2, 2005 4:09:25 am

Kulsum Beig you accuse this author of political myopia yet how can you disregard the glaring chariots of fire stoked by Uncle Sam and its cohorts who are refueling the flames of racism?

The US Patriot Act is merely one case in point. Political quiescence may portend to the norm for you Kulsum and human rights a romantic idealism to your ilk, yet it is your demagoguery of the status quo that impels an uphill battle bringing all moral consciousness into dishonorable disrepute.

Public information on illegal detention post 9/11 remains scant. It is brazenly clear that many POW`s were forcibly held incommunicado. Muslim detainees suffered physical and verbal abuse from despotic guards under the cruelest conditions of solitary confinement and the wearing of shackles during non-contact visits.

In Afghanistan hundreds of innocent Muslims were massacred in Qala-i-Jhangi. Despite international humanitarian law yelling for a moratorium on the use of cluster-weapons. Both Uncle Sam and Her Majesty`s government denied Amnesty International’s request for an investigation into the incidents at Qala-i-Jhangi fort.

A number of banana republics sold all their oranges short and jumped onto the ‘anti-terrorist’ bandwagon to stifle political dissent. Since it is de rigueur. Legally definitions of ‘terrorism’ are hazardously vague. The terrorist attacks fuelled a climate of hysteria garnering a useful cloak behind which to make inroads to curb the ambillical chord of democratic rights and civil liberties.

Here where I live in the UK, the “Blairite” government passed scantily clad ‘emergency’ legislation which provided for detention of foreign nationals without charge or trial, thereby tailoring a nebulous shadow criminal justice system.

The Anti-terrorism, Crime and Security Act 2001 cataclysmically contravenes Article 5(t) of the European Convention on Human Rights and Article 9 of the ICCPR [International Covenant on Civil and Political Rights] in order to allow for indefinite detention. Under the Act, the Secretary of State may order such detention, without charge or trial and without recourse to judicial review.

Kulsum what this poem attempts to portray is the hypocrisy and selectivity of governments and their handmaiden: the media. For example why do those who condemn human rights violations in Iraq negligently not protest against human rights violations by Russian troops in Chechnya, or by the authorities in Uzbekistan against Muslims who peacefully practice their faith outside the state apparatus?
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#32 Posted by Jahil on July 2, 2005 2:41:08 am
salute...

simply awesome..
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#29 Posted by OzerKhalid on July 1, 2005 10:26:13 pm
Farzana

You are one of the few individuals who has made a concerted effort towards ``constructive`` remarks on the poem itself. It is hoped (rather optimistically) that other interactors emulate this trail and make ``constructive criticism`` on the poem and its substantive subject matter.

Interactors, engage in relevance rather than resorting to enfeabled attempts at character slander. Chowk cannot remain an electronic boxing-ring for sheepish spineless characters who have way too much time swinging on the pendulum of their lives. The whistle is blown. The bouts have finished. The boxing match (should) be over.

Are we grown up enough on this forum ? Or will we carry on Eminemishly tit-for-tatting ? If readers do not have anything relevant to say let them plead the 5th Ammendment and retain their right to remain wisely silent.
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#27 Posted by OzerKhalid on July 1, 2005 9:34:13 pm
Dear Farzana

Gracias ``por`` your thought-provoking interact.

Farzana types “That is the reason why I thought your prologue could either be seen as defensive or a pre-emptive self-chastisement before a `crime`”.

Farzana the prologue is actually a caveat for all those who seek to tar this poem with the brush of bearing a fundamentalist slant. But since pigeon-holing is society’s favourite recreation the labelling comes as second-nature to sheepish interactors. Commonly found on these forums.

“This is too vast a spectrum...or if irony befits, then the unseeing naked masses are helpless products of Machiavellis.Their ears too are ``clogged with wax``, but for different reasons”.

FV a very poignant remark. The “Machiavelli`s” constitute a hegemonic superstructure (media, policies, government, laws) and an economic sub-structure (macro and micro) which wilfully eclipse the retina of the eyes so that the masses are blinded and stripped of any “garb” of intellectuality leaving them “unseeing” “naked” and “helpless”.

FV interacts “I hope you are not one of those who will stay snug only in the ``anguish and affliction``.

Rather than staying “snug” these gruesome global verities make me feel “stung”. Indeed lines drawn in the sand of perfection suffer a windy fate. And sculptures are never carved to perfection. Though that should never cease the sculptor from carry on chiselling. My chisels are words. For in the cyber universe they are all I can fall back on.

``Both are hunters with hungry intent``? Why kill your own lines?

FV sometimes a stab to one`s own style is uplifting. It puntures any traces of ego.

”Also, the use of some words in Caps appeared self-conscious- the flow should be its own emphasis.”

If anything they were “sub-conscious”.

``But tonight, we will keep on screaming``...and will you hear those screams when your ears are clogged with wax?

``Rhetorically`` they are meant to be clogged. But Farzana are they in practice ?

Farzana comments: ”Are you sure?! Pray, why? If innocuous poetry can be magnetic and refrigerators can be frozen, then I`ll be damed to leave the poets”.

Ebbing towards a “Dead Poet`s Society” ?

Farzana concludes “You will understand that I am only ``slaying``, only ``singing``, but not for ``the dead``...but for those who strive to be alive.

As opposed to those who merely “exist”?

RSVP. Many thanks.

It seems that ``cyber-ghosts`` and ``cyber-witches`` make a stellar ensemble do you not opine FV ?
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#26 Posted by hamidm2 on July 1, 2005 9:13:00 pm


the man from nigeria, explained

.......... i went back and read this ``poem`` to see if i had missed something, but there is nothing to miss - this ``piece`` is gibberish and anyone who is trying to make any sense out of it should also consider buying a bridge in brooklyn ............ i am really surprised farzana fell for this hoax - i always thought she had more brains than all the men on chowk put together .............

............ but this ``piece`` does explain why i keep on getting this letter from the man in nigeria who wants my bank account number so that he can deposit a million dollars - like ozer, he deserves full credit for trying and trying again ..........
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#25 Posted by BeeJay on July 1, 2005 5:15:52 pm

#24 Umer

Dear Umer, I’m shocked.

Although I kind of understand why you are frustrated with this poem, you know ALL life is precious (especially those of children)! Can we keep this discussion limited to the quality and genuineness of this “poem”, please!

Thanks.
BeeJay.


#17 FarzanaVersey (Addendum)
Farzana, if you share HP’s opinion that I’m “stalking” you, just say so and I’ll stop directing interacts to you. It’s not a big deal (really!) Thanks!

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#24 Posted by UmerMurtaza on July 1, 2005 4:51:52 pm
With all due respect,

Who gives a flying fuck about the dead of the 9/11? Who are they? Who cares? So we`ll have ripe tomatoes growing on the soil of the twin towers. People die all the time: Hindus, Muslims, black white, children, adults, men, women...

The truth is, if we spent even a single second of silence for every individual who had died unjustly, we`d never talk. Better to carry on and live your life and make sure it`s not YOU who`s hurting the other.

Ever since I slaughtered my first animal and saw how obedient the beast was and how easy it was to run that blade across its neck, I`m wondering if death is overrated, like one of those fancy roller coaster rides.

Umer M.
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#23 Posted by TheoVanGogh on July 1, 2005 3:52:06 pm


Lets have a moment of silence for the ONE MILLION Bengalis slaughtered by Pakistani Muslim psychopaths in the Kihad of 1971.

Lets have a moment of silence for the ONE MILLION Armenian Christians slaughtered by Turkish Muslim psychopaths in the Turkish Jihads at the start of the twentieth century.

Lets have a moment of silence for all the infidel victims of Islamic Jihadi psychopathic violence over the last hundred years, and the poor defenceless Christians and Animists being raped and slaughtered in the Sudan today.

Save the World from the Islamic Psychopaths. Can we have a few moments of silence please?

Amen.



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#22 Posted by BeeJay on July 1, 2005 2:51:17 pm

#21 HP

HP – my dear friend,

I’m not sure whether you are confused or not!

I believe that author Versey is fully capable of understanding and (if necessary, responding to) my simple, janitorial opinion of the “work” being discussed. The accusation of “stalking” is wrong and grossly unfair (especially if one is to go by the number of interacts on individuals’ boards, I’m far, far outnumbered by other individuals, such as YOURSELF!)

Author Versey, (in view of #21), are you sure you have the knights right?

Sincerely,
BeeJay.

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Interact Index

    #74 Nadia_Zehra
    #71 hamidm2
    #72 SR
    #70 hamidm2
    #69 BeeJay
    #68 OzerKhalid
    #65 BeeJay
    #67 OzerKhalid
    #63 BeeJay
    #61 BeeJay
    #57 BeeJay
    #58 OzerKhalid
    #59 OzerKhalid
    #62 OzerKhalid
    #73 cayenne
    #54 BeeJay
    #56 hamidm2
    #60 SR
    #64 hamidm2
    #66 SR
    #52 BeeJay
    #55 khamkhwa.
    #53 OzerKhalid
    #51 OzerKhalid
    #48 FarzanaVersey
    #49 OzerKhalid
    #46 BeeJay
    #50 OzerKhalid
    #45 googenschlaugen
    #44 Naqshbandi
    #47 hamidm2
    #43 hamidm2
    #42 stuka
    #38 KaalChakra
    #40 OzerKhalid
    #36 drlokraj
    #39 OzerKhalid
    #33 BeeJay
    #35 OzerKhalid
    #37 OzerKhalid
    #32 Jahil
    #29 OzerKhalid
    #27 OzerKhalid
    #26 hamidm2
    #25 BeeJay
    #24 UmerMurtaza
    #23 TheoVanGogh
    #22 BeeJay
    #21 HP
    #20 BeeJay
    #19 HP
    #18 hamidm2
    #28 OzerKhalid
    #17 FarzanaVersey
    #16 khamkhwa.
    #15 bongdongs
    #11 Urstruly
    #13 OzerKhalid
    #10 avkrishna
    #12 OzerKhalid
    #9 husnaangelique
    #8 scout
    #7 scout
    #14 OzerKhalid
    #6 Gin-Baba
    #5 kulsumbeig
    #4 CD_Lion
    #3 patwari
    #30 OzerKhalid
    #2 BeeJay
    #31 OzerKhalid
    #1 cayenne
    #34 OzerKhalid
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