Dev, Harry and I

thanks nb. You *will* see more of me, like it or not!

Burpinder- and that can`t be a real name!-this felt really sad, but so real. I honestly hadn`t expected it to be so good. I hope we see more of you.

nice :)
reminded me of places along the delhi-gurgaon route.

``KF kicks their a$$es anyday, warm or cold!
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Kingfisher is my favourite as well, after Hayward 2000 and this other border beer we used to drink..can`t recall the name.

Anyways, so the correct line should...

``Your beer has gone flat, let me get you another one`` ..since someone`s beer being cold is actually a welcome sign.

From one beer drinker to another...

burpinder:

For the record, I hate Guiness-. . . .

my esteem for you has gone down notches dude. jus` kiddin`! :)

#32 sucheta
What to say? I need a good editor! Everything you have pointed out became clear to me around the fourth re-read, but sorry to have inflicted the mistakes on you people.

#30 mannyd
``Is Burpinder your real name and what does it mean if anything?``
I am very real- isn`t that all that matters :)- to answer your question, it doesn`t mean anything, just a private joke.

#31 ana
stuka`s response is magically visible today, but thanks for the recap. For the record, I hate Guiness- or Fosters for that matter. KF kicks their a$$es anyday, warm or cold!

Nice! loved it.....

Regards,

Faruk

As a friend to many talli dosts this was very real :-)
Keep on writing.

Dear Burpinder,

Good writing, very authentic and nice descriptions - one can almost smell the petrol fumes and feel the dhaba atmosphere.

Couple of small pointers if you don`t mind - try to avoid some silly mistakes like Harry choked on his Old Monk (and a better Rum wasn`t made even in Jamaica), so how come Dev berates him for nursing his beer for too long? Also isn`t a beer supposed to be cold??

Try and see the scene in your own mind - that makes it easier to get the details right.

The dialogues are a tad too long.

But overall, it was really a very honest - no nonsense read, like the dhaba khaana! Good and hope to see much more of you.

Thanks and best of luck

Sucheta

burpinder:

stuka`s response had something to do with your writing being good and appealing to a certain group but his one beef being this:

That beer`s cold anyway, let`s order you another one.

``ye beear hai ke chai?`` he said. unless they were like some of those brits who drink warm beer with did he say chips? oh well. . . which was what my comment on guinness was a response to. but stuuks`s post will reappear by today or tomorrow hopefully, so this will be redundant.

i liked this. in a way it reminds me of heated conversations between my inebriated friends in neighborhood pubs after a long day of manual labor and/or frustration with the world.

keep writing!

Excellent work Burpinder. Far better than the professional crowd`s rants on Chowk. One question. Is Burpinder your real name and what does it mean if anything?

Re #28: hamidm
``very nice ......... brings back some fond memories even though in pakistan we don`t have roadside dhabas where you can get a drink or byob ......... any more``
...which is a tragedy... someday hamidbhai we shall share a bottle and philiosophize...inshallah...thanks for raising the bar at this thread by interacting here...


#24 delhiwala
``Gaali Galonch and reference to some cheap words.
That would give some attention these days, actually anything that different from the norm sells.``
Sells? You gotta be kidding me...chowk doesn`t pay its contributors :)...and yet we throng here desperate to see our names in print!!!

#20 stuka
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Serves you right for posting disgusting pics on UP... oh well, will just have to wait a couple days more to see what you thought of this. Or else mail me at burpinder@gmail.com

#18 dm
``Very interesting, burpinder, and provides a peep into a slice of India`s gen-x life. For me, the pathos of Dev`s tragedy does not come across forcefully, but maybe that was intended.``
If the guilt at bemoaning one`s ``trivial`` problems in the light of the ``bigger picture`` a GenX-er is confronted with every day came across, I would consider my work done! Thanks for your comment.

#19 & others rahul_capri
``talli`` conversations are the best, aren`t they?!!! In Dilli or elsewhere, doesn`t matter.

YLH & besharm,
It`s an incredible thrill for a part-time writer to see his words being quoted back to him. Thanks!

#14 hindvi
``...college cafetaria humour...``
You mean well...but OUCH!!!! :)

#26 shobig_sifar
``...think you could have concocted details relevant to the theme a bit more intelligibly, instead of thriving on those random dialogues...``
Overelucidation could have well killed a ``nothing`` theme like this...but you`re point is well-taken...perhaps next time...

#2 faisaluno
``this is pretty funny...unlike most losers who ``write`` for this website, you do have ishtyle as they would say in karachi.``
I like Karachi already :)
& Beej`s reply:
``Obviously, you got stuck on the jokes that the characters threw at each other - I think the underlying theme was rather serious!``
Was it really? Isn`t that what our lives have become- tragedy viewed as comedy and vice versa? I`m glad both points came across.

Everyone else, thanks for all the nice words. Will pen more when I get the chance.

very nice ......... brings back some fond memories even though in pakistan we don`t have roadside dhabas where you can get a drink or byob ......... any more

............... but many years ago, before the rebirth of islam, we used to have a drink at the ``fire jumper`s `` khoka which stood at the end of the bridge over the railway tracks near uet in lahore ............ muhammad ali, the proprieter, was a real fire jumper - he used to set himself on fire and jump into a tub of water from a thirty feet platform at the local melas ............ the man was an artiste, made a mean omlette and was always willing to share his meager cache of ice - sometimes we gave him a peg or two ....... vat-1 was about fifteen rupees a puwa and you could also use it to poison the rats in the hostel !

#26:

bhai woh kya kehtay haiN? aisee baat (ya dua) nahiN daitay jo puri ho ja`aye...;)

theek hay aap pohanch ker ittilaa daiN hum haazir ho jaiN gay.... phir dono daikh laiN gay.

(waisay aapas ki baat hay....braader hamidm say bhi pooch lo.....ger humara koi dost itni lambi lambi falsafiyana baataiN keray....is qis`m kay ma`hOL maiN...tou oos ka hosh foran thikanay la daitay hain hum)

rgds

t

Gaali Galonch and reference to some cheap words.
That would give some attention these days, actually anything that different from the norm sells.