Care Taker

Satish Tumne May 7, 2004

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#9 Posted by dwazir on July 16, 2006 2:37:07 am

If he were not so dirty I would have hugged this little adorable kid. And kissed him.

Probably ur this line subdued..the whole Theme of the story by telling He would remain the same dirty...( how come then adorable as u say IF not dirty ) all his life..

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#8 Posted by tashwini on July 22, 2004 1:07:33 pm

Sometimes the thoughts and ideas are much more important than the little nuances like syntax.
Have you heard about syntax in paintings??
Personally, I enjoyed this piece..
Thanks

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#7 Posted by fiz on May 20, 2004 6:02:23 am

love the last line...good effort!
fiz

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#6 Posted by flyhighkites on May 11, 2004 6:32:16 am

Agree with you, khammy. May be I am a stickler for form, but this is disturbing.

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#5 Posted by flyhighkites on May 11, 2004 6:32:16 am

Wait! this sounds like an exercise in: correct punctuation, insert articles, and otherwise edit the whole thing. Uffoh! Am outta here.

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#4 Posted by Ansari on May 8, 2004 11:27:35 pm

Very sweet. Thank you for sharing, Satish.

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#3 Posted by khamkhwa. on May 7, 2004 10:07:44 pm

[``Madam, is this your bag?`` a voice of small boy waked me up.]

..waked me up?.. i don`t think i have the courage to read further...sorry old chap...

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#2 Posted by kaurasach on May 7, 2004 1:04:45 pm

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#1 Posted by Malyck on May 7, 2004 1:04:45 pm

In actual life there are caretake governments whose Provincial Governors take 1-1.5 million to appoint people the judge of Lahore High Court.

WHY DONT I SEE SUCH STUFF AROUND ME .... Tell me chowk writers with imaginery kids and malangbabas...where do u find such honest and loving people?

Is it that I am too impure to get interact with such people OR you people tell lies a lot ?

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