Elusive

oh no! do i seem so shallow? the title did attract me owing to the similarity but the comments given are on merit.

Re: # 7

Thank you so much!

Although, I hope it wasn`t just the similarity of my poem`s title and your user name ;)

words when woven together with care and creativity, produce such a great piece.I really like your style and this poem certainly opened new horizons in my mind.

looking forward to more.

regards.

Re: # 5

Oooh feather! I hope its a peacocks...

I am glad my poem was provoking thoughts in you :) I don`t know if i`ll ever be a true poet that moves and inspires people, such as Rumi, but i`ll do fine with just so-so poet.

To answer your questions...

Passage 1:

Guiding gate is a reference to a place where peace, comfort and truth can be found. Yes, I used that for spiritual imagery. I debated between making it capitalized, but thought that would make it strongly refer to heaven, which was not my exact intention. I ofcourse used the ``guiding gate`` as a metaphor for something that would resolve the concepts of sin, pain and truth within the jungle (representing our world, our thoughts etc.) The guiding gate doesn`t have to be heaven/janaat or a fantasy-based eden. It could be something in the NOW. It could be something we don`t know..or the gate might actually be God. The point is, its hidden there...and i dont know what IT is..but I feel whatever it is to be there. When I wrote these few lines there were a few things going thru my mind: sin, confusion, the pain of not knowing/understanding `truth` and isolation (from self, others, God, reality).

These two lines represent a very pessimistic outlook infact. Because i am stating that to get out of this misery of being completely lost...one needs this `guiding gate`..and to find this guiding gate..u must find it in a jungle (representing our world) ..and in the jungle...it is within our own ``heart`s molten hidden core`` (basically..its no walk in the park to overcome the situation). So..this enlightement is within us..but incredibly hard to grasp..and just that fact makes one feel even more isolated (where the distance and pain are both growing)

Passage 5:

``Is there a religious undertone behind this?``

Yes.
What do you get out of these two lines if I may ask? (ofcourse..there`s no right/wrong in poetry)

``Im just trying to gauge to what level religion/spirituality inspired your poem ? ``

Almost all my poems have these themes (God, spirituality, truth, isolation, reality) . I have more. They`re even worse in terms of making sense out of them :P (or maybe worse in general hehe)

/fahd

A feather in your cap Fahd:

this is a very thought-provoking poem. you have the makings of a true poet...my two questions to you

in passage 1 you express:

``In the jungle lies the guiding gate
Under heart`s molten hidden core``

Is this ``guiding gate`` a spiritual reference to heaven (janaat) or just a fantasy-based ``eden`` of somekind ?

and my second question is regarding passage 5, where you write:

``Worship`s end
Denial`s friend``

Is there a religious undertone behind this?

Im just trying to gauge to what level religion/spirituality inspired your poem ?

Thank you all :)

/fahd

This one really got to me...

``...The pain grows
No comfort found...``

I can REALLY feel it! Perhaps I DO have some promise as a poet!

I liked this Fahd. Some lines more than others but I liked it.

``Destruction hasn`t a form Divine``

hmmm....

miriam

Fahd:

some very good lines

passage 5 was elusive

t