Asoka

generally, i think for a poem, it is pretty loose, and needs some work. but i liked it nonetheless! : ) reminds me of `dard di raunaq`!

-bilal

first of all,
thank you all for reading. from the number of time this has been read and interacted on lends me to believe that i should only write about sex. good to know.
also, i have been laughing so hard from the interacts that i am peeing in my pants over here in Sri Lanka. Im on dialup so i get to things a little bit slower...

i wrote this poem about 2 years ago...in paris. really dont need to go into more details...it`s a fabulous city.
i like the way temporal put it...men come and men go..and it`s not so much a sex poem as more an exploration of self (i hate talking in such high faluted ways but internet time is money here so you get the first words i can think of)...

i am enjoying the comments on the line ``So it’s not me but what they want to see that is beautiful.``

unfortuanately, i almost never break down my writing...i will however love to talk about te issues the piece may raise.
don`t you ever feel that in realtionships that is what happens....we look for things in people that we want them to have? it works for as long as you can see that and one day you can decide, nope, wasnt there...

thanks to whoever called it a crappy love poem...

besos y abrazos from SL....big ups to shore sahib, nadiz zehra and atif...atif, you know im going to go back and re-read that when i get to a dsl connection...really needed to just let loose and laugh ttoday....thanks.

z.rizvi.

Hawt

echoboom, want more?

Thehro lagai aoon,
Nainon mein kajraa,
Choti mein goond aaoon,
Phoolon ka gajraaa,

Mein to ker aoon sola singhaar ray...........

What is this smell? Has somebody put a pile of roses in the room?

a bedroom saga!

#22:malikjahanzeb

yaara kyaa yaad dilaa diyaa. Ubb sunnaa paRRay gaa

``Savaan beetaa jaaey
Haey raam, saavan beetaa jaey

Aj naheeN aaey baa`aaalmaaa
Saavan beetaa jaaey.``

Re: # 23

Can`t you see, she has a thing for horney ayatullahs.

#12 by atif2

LOL!! That was funny indeed.

It’s only the back ache which is penetrating in the senses. The whole weight of the poem crush to the fulcrum: “I want it to hurt. ”.

The above intercourse is a relational beauty assessment , doesn’t look original, as exquisiteness is a trademark of
-temples
-Model of Rodin
-warrior

Thats what the writer has conveyed:

``So it’s not me but what they want to see that is beautiful. ``

Or this line has some other meaning...a bit confused!

Cheers,

I can`t believe it. We have the whole Jihad psychopath crew discussing a Krappy love poem like a bunch of twelve year old girls. `So beautiful.....so sensual`....Shaddap!

I always knew you were a bunch of f@gz

#4: Beauty lies in the eyes of beholder.

Chand ki berwa ghar wo lagaye,
Aur bhi mera jee lalchaye,

Yaar haseen gale lag jaye,
Meri umer gujerti jaye....

Feels like the heater is on for a long time.

---

Main dussdaan eh bibi kee kehndi ay.

Ik janaanary banday naal sex keeta tay dubara karna chhandi ey.

Re: # 19
Perhaps you should Vomit! It`ll make you feel better.

God forbid that Shaeri should lean towards homosexuality. Such a inhuman thing. Those Shaers should be flogged for writing poetry with homosexual undertones.

Atif Mian,
Beyhoodgi Shaer ki Shaeri mein nahi,
Shairi Padhney waley ki soch mein hai!

echo sahib - Did you say ``bayhooda``??? Let me tell you what is beyhooda. The poetry that I had to explain in my 11th and 12th class was not just beyhooda, it was leaning towards homosexuality. I had to bite my tongue everytime I had to explain about ``shaair ka mehboob``. In the begining I tolerated it thinking that perhaps he was referring to God. But then that stretch of imagination became too stretched.

urstruly - Somehow I knew I would confuse you. Sounds like I will have to invest a little bit more time with you through chowk to bring you up to the par.

Shoresahib - Nope, I was just curious. Nothing else. As long as you have a smile on your face, it really doesn`t matter whether you got it through a guy or a girl (I feel like vomiting now).

Re: # 17
I had thought uptill now that Mr Urstruly and Echoboom were prudes, but Allah Ki panah, Hai Ram!
You guys are killing me with laughter.

Re: # 16 echo

yaar yeh sufi bhi baray tharki hotay haiN. sab mazay loot liyay baad maiN keh diya, ``aji woh to ishq-e-haqiqi tha, sharam nahin ati aap ko``.