You: The Woman of Today

It does not read or sound poetic.
Plain statements/sentences can not pass for poems.
I hope you do not mind my objective views.
Best wishes.

please man ..... respect the woman who makes u man ...who makes u humans... when i read the camplain ... disrespect of woman ... maie bhagha ..... now no more pakistani she became //inter national star.., u man make it passible

Re: # 7

Words spoken from the heart.

They exist and give give give until they can give no more!
They love, whilst hoping and praying that one day their love will be returned a, not only by their parents but by their husband too.
But the sad truth is, those that love too much are oppressed until they can love no more!

Straight and simple if not very inspiring. Too many cliches, but worth a glance.

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Dear Priyanka,

I took another look at your poem and interacts. I hope you receive all the things in life that you are seeking, as well as all the respect that you deserve!

Sincerely,
BeeJay.

re #6,

... actually same is the case with ``person`` and ``human`` ... but don`t tell her this ... I plead contemporary insanity ...

#3 on the money!

See this poem is talking about just one aspect of a woman`s life, which is on the personal front. I could have extended it to a woman`s relation with her mother, her sister or her pet for instance. But, that would fill pages and let the essence of `keeping it simple and short` vanish. I may even land up writing about a woman`s career, the software she write, how she delegates the work to her subordinates, how she convinces her boss that the the idea she is proposing is more logical and caters more to market statstics. But, thats a different issue alltogether. Guess that wont gel with this aspect of her life in a short poem. I may rather write another article for that.

Re: # 12

Depends on what you call ``ideal``. I agree with urstruly that this poem is a bit too patriarchal. The woman of today says the title, but seems kinda medieval in its ``ambition content`` if you will.

Hey hey....just before all the readers let their imagination loose as to what`s the motive behind posting this poem, let me please clarify myself. The poem *does not* try to convey something or make an impact on the society per se. Neither am I a feminist or as some say a mindless zombie :) . Its just a simple short n sweet poem. Arright, life is far from being ideal, but dreaming for an ideal life is not a crime either.

Why is Chowk suddenly bombarded with articles and poems on women? What have we done to deserve this special attention? Sometimes it is very sweet if the facts are spelled out.

Re: # 6

Excellent observation. I hope you were not a woman in your previous life.