A Passing Glance

I emailed a copy of this poem to a girl that I am currently trying to (unsuccessfully) flirt with, below is transcript of what followed: p.s. start from the bottom

Sad when i spoke to you earlier you said i`m sending a poem to you. didn`t you? well if you are sending this to me and only me what the hell am i supposed to think. Obviously i will think that this is what you are feeling for me. Right? put yourself in my shoes and think about it. Secondly, if this is just a poem about spinning around and dancing then you`ve got it wrong coz a coquette means a flirtatious girl who says `here take me` and a pirouette means ballerina means smmoochy. The whole damn thing is smoochy. do you seriously think that i`m actually portraying my image to you as stooping so low and giving up my self esteem. do you Saad?

-----Original Message-----

From: Saad P. Aslam, CBG

Sent: Monday, November 01, 1999 12:11 PM

To: Rachel D`Souza, FID

Subject: RE:

do you know what it means? it just means spinning around!!! like dancing and by the way this poem is not talking about you the author is taking about his own experience i just liked the way he put it and wanted to share it with you!! i am sorry if you are offended!!!

-----Original Message-----

From: Rachel D`Souza, FID

Sent: Monday, November 01, 1999 12:09 PM

To: Saad P. Aslam, CBG

Subject: RE:

No Saad yours was very insulting. i am no Coquette nor a pirouette.

-----Original Message-----

From: Saad P. Aslam, CBG

Sent: Monday, November 01, 1999 11:55 AM

To: Rachel D`Souza, FID

Subject: RE:

yes i know your poem is really bad! but mine was good!

-----Original Message-----

From: Rachel D`Souza, FID

Sent: Monday, November 01, 1999 11:43 AM

To: Saad P. Aslam, CBG

Subject: RE:

Bad poetry. Very offending. You`ve done it again.

BAD POETRY

by

Whirling Rachel

Your poetry jabs my side like a thorn

and as you sing on like Al Capone

I`ll be Nina Simone

And defecate on your microphone

And baby i`m not the ballerina you`ve shown and if you ever see me dance you`l know i`m baaaaaaaaaaad to the bone.

My stone is my own and your stone is your own.

Remember me once for i`ll remember you while i`m picking my nose

Your the sun and i`m your moon

Life is funny so F--- yourself and save your money

-----Original Message-----

From: Saad P. Aslam, CBG

Sent: Monday, November 01, 1999 10:22 AM

To: Rachel D`Souza, FID

Subject:

Importance: High

A Passing Glance

by

Whirling Dervish

Pretty poem. Very evocative. But can `she`sometimes be described in terms other than her body or sensuosness? Probably this would break away from the `woman` of the ghazal but `aurat ki tarif` can also be attempted a bit differently. (I interpret this a bit literally for the comment).

Good Poem. Really like the last para(?). And Whirling Derwish got his name in as well just like all great Urdu Poets and all great Rap artists do.

what lyricism! A very pretty poem.