Translucence

Love the slight changes...to the original. :)

Originals good too. :)

Seams of an ocean, intertwined. Beneath these gliding waves, a school of swimming dolphins singing serenades of joy. I, for one, once drowning with mildly rejoiced sorrow now float indifferently above the breath bubble of a certain mermaid; longing for liberty; rising to freedom. Yet another fettering step more close.

Thanks, Maryam.

wow, that`s so sweet :)

thank you nadia...it`s all of my pleasure to be of some literary stimulation to you :)

I always wonder what will be your next masterpiece while having your present. I didn`t come out of your smoking metamorphosis...Your poems boom their words in all squares which are hidden or forgotten
making them shine and feel with me again...Some Lost of me hugs me again
Wonderful Maryam, I hope you always remain blessed with treasures of blowing mind
and making one fly unconsiously.
Nadia

ew.

SERIOUSLY! JUST FEW CHANGE OF WORDS AND NOW WE CAN ALSO UPLOAD IT AT DESI BABA ............... GR8 POEM INDEED .......... GOOD WORK

So you’re taking away
My hymen of defence
In this battle
In this search

Flirt against flirt
Grinding, rubbing
Creating the occasional spark
It seems like there maybe a fire
Maybe hot…

Perhaps we’ll turn on

So keep trying
O Perseverant one…
I`ll use my hands to guide you
Under the ``twilight``
At this bewitched minutes
Even the rockiest terrain
Glows, shimmers
Translucent like jelly fish

So come, search mine
Who knows what we’ll discover
About you
About me
Swimming endlessly, through the river.

``Flint against flint
Grinding, rubbing
Creating the occasional spark
It seems like there maybe a fire
Maybe not…

Perhaps we’ll burn good``

very well said. hope to read more from you.

i like it.

=)

i lowe you all too.
breathing can be hazardous too. seinfeld- lol.
i think the jelly fish in finding nemo partly inspired me..
hm.

Flint against flint
Grinding, rubbing
Creating the occasional spark
It seems like there maybe a fire
Maybe not…
.
.
.
.
So keep trying
O Perseverant one…
Use your hands to guide you
Under the twilight
At this bewitched hour
Even the rockiest terrain
Glows, shimmers
Translucent like jelly fish

very nice..

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It`s weird! I really like it! The jellyfish and rock imagery is really good. I hope I see more of your stuff!

Kyla

you draw good analogies related to burning as well as smoking. they are both hazardous to health.