Opaque Particles of Sunlit Sand

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Beej:

I have difficulty imagining sun-burnt grass next to the sea beach – can it even happen?

yes it can...i have seen it on several islands in the caribbean ...and in some places i have seen palm trees growing a few feet into the sea...don’t ask me how they survive....maybe their roots grow inland…maybe the regular rain fall helps…

re: kyla

she is right...poets ought to exercise greater respect for words (and punctuations)

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Re#3 Kyla

[it needs either more or no punctuation - the semicolons in the middle of the stanza and nothing at the end....]

Nitpicker!

I have difficulty imagining sun-burnt grass next to the sea beach – can it even happen?

And how the heck can one reconcile “numbered days” with immorality! Almost an oxymoron!

But the words are sweet!

And somehow, I still like this poem – perhaps there is some attraction in the nature of the abstract itself – or just the challenge of decoding it!

I like it – and don’t NOBODY ask me to explain why!

Sincerely,
Beej.

is this about two Valruses basking in in the sun?

It`s hard to do formal poetry well, but this is quite nice, although a little predictable. It seems like it needs either more or no punctuation - the semicolons in the middle of the stanza and nothing at the end make it hard to breathe while reading it. Having said all that nitpicky stuff, it`s really quite nice.

That is a wonderful work! Thank you.

opaque