Tania i liked your story...specially its full circle effect...with a critical point of view....and that too...positive...cut out the extra ``tooraj`` from the text...you don`t really need it...it will make your text stronger.

for example...this paragraph...

``Tania is in her floor lounge and Tooraj is kissing the side of her neck. And there are other people in the lounge but no one notices. And Tooraj kisses her neck softly. But Tania stares straight in front of her. She wants to put her hand on his head but she doesn`t. And nobody notices. Then there is a fire. The whole dorm. is on fire and people are running. But Tooraj stands next to her. And Saadia is there and she is running out of the building.``

we all know tooraj is doing stuff....why keep on repeating his name...

good job...